Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
The topic raises the controversial issue that governments should ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need. The reason why government should aid major cities is because the nations’s cultural traditions are generated in cities. While I agree that major cities deserved financial support, I disagree with the reason because of the following reasons.
Admittedly, since major cities may have longer histories and more historical heritages, which makes them where the nations’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated. However, if governments aid the cities to make them thrive, cultural traditions is not the most important reason. For cities to thrive, there should be more job opportunities provided, better investment environment for business. None of these are related to cultural traditions but are germane to business.
Second, the reason why it is necessary to provide the major cities financial support is because there are companies and people work there. With companies and people flood to cities, there will be demand for public construction, such as subway systems or office buildings. With better public construction, more companies are willing to have their offices there, and the productivity of the workers may be increased. As a result, governments may expect more tax income, which means more money to support the cities. This could be a vicious circle for the cities to thrive.
Third, the cultural traditions are usually preserved and generated in local areas. Since major cities contend people from different districts, there might not be distinctive cultural traditions in cities. On the other hand, local areas, without many people from other places move in, preserve their own cultural traditions. For instance, Okinawa, an island which is far away from other parts of Japan, preserves their own music, language and traditions. Therefore, it has been a popular travel spots for tourists.
Taken together, it is important to offer financial support to the major cities, not because of its cultural traditions, but because of they being the economical centers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
... why government should aid major cities is because the nations’s cultural traditions are g...
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Line 7, column 495, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'spot'?
Suggestion: spot
...Therefore, it has been a popular travel spots for tourists. Taken together, it is ...
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Line 9, column 125, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...because of its cultural traditions, but because of they being the economical centers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, while, for instance, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1806.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50609756098 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73716652887 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509146341463 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7979733806 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.333333333 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428510356588 0.243740707755 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145295529215 0.0831039109588 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112589557245 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247405776904 0.150359130593 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142268619781 0.0667264976115 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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