Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The prompt argues that governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support that they need in order to thrive because it is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated. However, I mostly disagree with this position for two reasons which I will elucidate below. Nevertheless, I do concede that some form of funding should be made available to major cities.
To begin, most major cities are commercial centers filled with people of different cultures that come to seek greener pastures and hence, the traditions of a place cannot be generated nor preserved in the cities but in rural areas. For example, Lagos, the commercial capital of Nigeria is a land of opportunities where people from different parts of the country come to search for jobs and to start up businesses. Lagos also houses the only sea port that where every import from outside of Nigeria is cleared before being transported to other parts of the country. In the same vein, Lagos is home to the busiest international airport in Nigeria where most of the international airlines that convey passengers to and from Nigeria is located. With the continuous influx of people to Lagos, there is hardly an space left for generation and preservation of tradition as most the state’s landmass has been taken up for commercial activities. The nearby Ogun state is a better suited to generate and preserve traditions than Lagos state as it is already home to some cultural monuments such as the Olumo Rock and Ifa shrine and financial support from the government is more expedient in such areas.
Moreover, most major cities are able to generate income through various means and may not need financial support from the government. Still citing Lagos Nigeria as an example, every business must pay tax to the state which generates a huge amount of income. Also, for every import into the country, a custom duty is charged. Likewise at the Lekki toll gate, a toll fee is paid by every vehicle that utilizes the toll gate for the number of times the vehicle uses the toll gate per day. All these generate a substantial amount of income for the state and they may not require financial support from the government.
However, in Abuja the capital city of Nigeria, a cultural artifact, Zuma Rock is located. Due to its location in the capital city of the country where most tourists will love to visit, it is important that the government provides financial support to preserve the cultural tradition in order to attract more visitors to the site. This will ultimately generate income for the government as well.
In conclusion, most major cities are commercial centers that can generate income for themselves and do not serve to generate or preserve cultural traditions of a nation. However, in some cases, major cities can generate and preserve the cultural traditions of a nation and should be funded by the government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 805, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...lux of people to Lagos, there is hardly an space left for generation and preservat...
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Line 2, column 853, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... left for generation and preservation of tradition as most the state’s landmass h...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
... the country, a custom duty is charged. Likewise at the Lekki toll gate, a toll fee is p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96356275304 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62748357756 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451417004049 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7292371329 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.052631579 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349459274909 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12072844631 0.0831039109588 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144119308339 0.0758088955206 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24217881708 0.150359130593 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118782515066 0.0667264976115 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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