Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Where are the nation's cultural traditions preserved and generated? In the cites or in the villages? As most people would agree, villages and small towns are the areas where you could find a nation's diverse culture and traditions. In this prompt, the author claims that governments must ensure that major cities receives financial support in order to thrive. To support this claim, the author argues that the cities are the place where the nation's cultural traditions preserved and generated. I mostly agree with the claim made by the author. However, the reason provided to support this claim is not appropriate and true. Hence, I disagree with the reason provided.
To begin with, I believe, it is the duty of the government of any nation to provide financial aid to the cities and the villages for their development. Finance is the major factor contributing for the overall growth of a country. For example, to provide the fundamental need of , say water, to the overall city which is an important factor government has to invest financially to provide this essential requirement. Hence, the government must ensure that proper finance is devoted to the major cities, as these major cities contribute the most to the economy of the nation.
Secondly, the cultural traditions are mostly originated in the small towns and villages of a country, and are preserved there. For example in India, the 'saree', Indian traditioinal form of clothing, are worn by the women in small towns and villages on a daily basis. However, we do not see this form of clothing in the major major cities in India. Similarly, there are various traditional programs that are celebrated in the small towns of a country and are not seen in major cities. Hence, in my opinion, cities are not the primary areas where nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Moreover, the claim made by the author is correct but the reason does not seem to really support the claim. Nevertheless, if the governments provide the small towns and villages with necessary funds to preserve and generate the nation's cultural traditions, it would be more beneficial. These towns and villages can be a famous tourist destination in future, if appropriate funds are provided to preserved and generated the nation's cultural traditions, eventually, the villages and towns would develop more and contribute to the nations economy by attracting more tourists.
To conclude, the reason on which the claim is based is not true and I disagree with it. However, the claim on its own is essentialnd important.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...owns are the areas where you could find a nations diverse culture and traditions. In this...
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Line 2, column 277, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...mple, to provide the fundamental need of , say water, to the overall city which is...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: major
...do not see this form of clothing in the major major cities in India. Similarly, there are v...
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Line 4, column 348, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ges can be a famous tourist destination in future, if appropriate funds are provided to ...
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Line 4, column 383, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion in future, if appropriate funds are provided to preserved and generated the ...
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Line 4, column 530, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ould develop more and contribute to the nations economy by attracting more tourists. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, similarly, so, as to, for example, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2141.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04952830189 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72239056357 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417452830189 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 675.0 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.5471535845 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3181818182 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2727272727 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437770078833 0.243740707755 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13542348363 0.0831039109588 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11614907136 0.0758088955206 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22748209097 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11923732334 0.0667264976115 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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