Claim: It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
Reason: The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished.
A hero is someone you admire and look upto and is not someone who is infallable. The definition of hero is not of a perfect person but of an perfect example. A true symbol of altruism is one of the traits exhibited by a hero. I mostly agree with the claim for the stated reason, however I do concede that this is not true at all times and sometimes media can favor the odds.
The society we live in is very reluctant in the first place to regard someone as a hero because the world is too competitve and no one wants to treat the other one as a hero they rather want to become one. Inspite of all this even if someone is given the title of a hero, the media swoops in to take the place of the enemy. The media tries to potrait all the negative characterictics and sometimes even rumor some to the public in order to disrupt the only good reputation of the hero. The only reason is to make profit out of it and seek attention from the crowd. For example many Indians believed that Baba Ram Dev was a true disciple of god and they listened and followed his advices.They treated him like a hero until media took to the public that he raped a teenager. The accusations by the media took a toll on his reputation and his followers began to decline and he was no longer considered a hero. The remarks made by the media have not proven to be true but still they hampered the reputation by creating an impact on people's mind.
In most of the cases media tends to foment in order to increase their TRP and be lucrative. They sometimes create stories to destroy the well earned reputation of a hero and sometimes they find evidence. In other cases for instance when Sushant Singh (a bollywood actor) commited suicide, the media potrayed him as a hero blaming all the people from the industry that influnced him into taking such an action. The media event went on to dictate how intelligent and generous person he has and that everyone should respect him. In this case the media made him the hero.
The media played two different roles here and is mostly associated with diminishing one's image. The true nature of media targets those who are in power or popular to gain the necessary attention from the public they need as a result a hero is targeted and the result can end in a wane or wax of his image.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... hero is not of a perfect person but of an perfect example. A true symbol of altru...
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Line 3, column 688, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
... they listened and followed his advices.They treated him like a hero until media too...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, still, well, for example, for instance, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1876.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35266821346 5.05705443957 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34809432882 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491879350348 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4676273658 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.222222222 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9444444444 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228036317439 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709716437781 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287951970043 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132370533688 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419081737175 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 12.1639044944 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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