Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system. Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Laws and legal system are made for using forcing power to monitor citizen's behavior, to maintain the stable and safety of the society. Along with the society development, the laws are gradually modified and added to achieve more fairness and justice. The world runs imperfectly, some problems still need to be fixed by improving the current law and legal system. Someone argues this issue happens due to the laws cannot change people's minds. Personally, I mostly agree with the ultimate result, but disagree with the threshold reasoning. In my view, those issues which cannot be solved yet are caused and limited by the imperfection and disability of the law system but not the law's impact.
Firstly, laws are imperfect, it improved by steps. Some problems cannot be solved at the very beginning as laws generally lagging. Accumulated unfair and unjust problems rouse people to fight for themselves, the fights win more attention from people in different fields to care about those issues, then the law set up later. For instance, throughout the nineteenth century, many feminist’s goals were gradually achieved, especially the rights of married women to control their own property, until 1920, women in US gained their rights to vote. Those laws and regulations were set up gradually, and those laws have strong impact on both people and society development later.
Furthermore, another characteristic of law is it acts to prevent invisible problems. Some problems exposed and alerted at first, then human starts to pay attention on the crisis, when the laws set up, people's minds are corrected and changed gradually, and the laws could prevent the same problem happens again. Take the London smog in 1952 as an example. The smog caused by unclean fuel in daily use utility and industrial activities, plus the weather factor in that winter, around 4000 people were killed by lung related diseases. After that tragedy, people started paying attention to the environment in London, they set up Clean Air Act to curtail the pollution exhaust to the air. Besides the protection of air, people also changed mind to care more about their living environment, like pollution water, wasted resources and some others related with public health problems. Accordingly, some laws were set after crisis to prevent similar crisis happen again.
To conclusion, I mostly disagree the opinion of laws cannot change people’s mind and heart as long as they would accept education. Laws in our society is imperfect, so we still should care more about it, improve the legal system is also the best way to improve our society.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, still, then, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2199.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 427.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14988290398 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58809434069 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552693208431 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9955767349 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.95 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.35 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396803484752 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12168706643 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930656142362 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256446284697 0.150359130593 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0861504741342 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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