Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
In contemporary society, legislations are made to protect us from harm, or prevent ourselves from negative behaviors such as stealing. However, because laws circumscribe our actions by censuring us rather than enlightening us, it would not alter our convictions.
Admittedly, because of the fear of infringement of the constitution, we sometimes inhibit our deepest avarice and thus the society is remained serene. For instance, before the legislation of the Kim Young Lan Law, politician were venal and there was numerous instances of lobbing between them and mass corporations. However, after this law- which severely punishes anyone who are in a prominent position and receive a gift costing more than $5s - was legislated, the Korean government has become more transparent compared to the past due to the fear of this law. Hence, it is lucid that laws do obviates some social issues.
Nevertheless, because the laws restrict our behaviors by the means of punishment rather than by enlightening us, our nature does not change. Even though politician, major announcers, revered professors are resisting to be corrupted by the Kim Young Lan Law, their cravenness for a higher position, or money will not be mitigated. Therefore, they might be on the look for a chance to transgress this law and receive some kind of benefit like the former president Lee: he was caught violating this anti-corruption law by accepting a Rolex watch from Samsung. Consequently, although laws may inhibit our behavior, it cannot truly change our minds.
Furthermore, laws are not the main influence when it comes to forming one's characters. Although, it inhibits our behaviors, it is the natural or social environment that has a prominent effect on our traits. For instance, a girl raised to be honest and kind by her parents presents a decorous behavior not because of the law inhibits it, but because of the family education she has received from her childhood. In addition, Chinese sages name Kong and Soon debated over the natural instinct of humans: whether people are born as genuine or as evil. Even though the notion of inborn good or bad does not make total sense, from it we can infer that the characteristics of humans are determined by the milieu around them, not by the law itself.
In conclusion, although it is sound to asseverate that legislations guide us to be civilians, it does not change our morals. In contrast, our morals and convictions are formed by our surroundings not by the constitution.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 72, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...main influence when it comes to forming ones characters. Although, it inhibits our b...
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Line 7, column 696, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding milieu'?
Suggestion: the surrounding milieu
...acteristics of humans are determined by the milieu around them, not by the law itself. In conclusio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 411.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10948905109 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98012393297 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571776155718 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8645917325 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.529411765 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94117647059 5.21951772744 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132713997041 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447536343452 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347519582195 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0717874611008 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419105418794 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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