[Claim] Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system. [Reason] Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds. [Specific Task Instruction: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.]
Laws and legal system are made for using forcing power to monitor citizen's behavior, to maintain the stable and safety of the society. Along with the society development, the laws are gradually modified and added to achieve more fairness and justice. The world does not run perfectly, there are still some problems cannot be solved by the current law and legal system, someone argues this issue due to the laws cannot change people's minds. Personally, I mostly agree with the ultimate result, but disagree with the threshold reasoning. In my view, those issues are caused and limited by the imperfection and disability of the law system but not the law's impact.
Firstly, laws are imperfect, it improved by steps. Some problems cannot be solved at the very beginning as laws generally lagging. Accumulated unfair and unjust problems rouse people to fight for themselves, the fights win more attention from people in different fields to care about those issues, then the law set up later. For instance, throughout the nineteenth century, many feminist goals were gradually achieved, especially the rights of married women to control their own property, until 1920, women in US gained their rights to vote. Those law and regulation were set up gradually, and those laws have strong impact on both people and society development later.
Furthermore, another characteristic of law is it acts to prevent invisible problems. Some problems exposed and alerted at first, then human start to pay attention on the crisis, when the laws set up, people's minds are corrected and changed gradually, and the laws could prevent the same problem happens again. Take the London smog in 1952 as an example. The smog caused by unclean fuel in daily use utility and industrial activities, plus the weather factor in that winter, around 4000 people were killed by lung related diseases. After that tragedy, people started paying attention to the environment in London, they set up Clean Air Act to curtail the pollution exhaust to the air. Besides the protect of air, people also changed mind to care more about their living environment, like pollution water, wasted resources and some others related with public health problems. Accordingly, some laws were set after crisis to prevent similar crisis happen again.
Finally, due to the complex of humanity, some problems caused by the dark side of human nature, however, one's mindset and heart can only be changed when they accept to be educated. Laws work in the way to educate people and alert people about the consequence of bad behaviors, education is the best way to influence people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 543, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this law' or 'Those laws'?
Suggestion: This law; Those laws
...omen in US gained their rights to vote. Those law and regulation were set up gradually, a...
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Line 5, column 693, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e pollution exhaust to the air. Besides the protect of air, people also changed mind to car...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...the dark side of human nature, however, ones mindset and heart can only be changed w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, still, then, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09976798144 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50153026201 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561484918794 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1910266733 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.684210526 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256339737874 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824696853646 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728644845008 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163590781442 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676119453085 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.