Claim: Scholastic art and music programs are so important that the government should fund those programs in schools that cannot afford them. Reason: Students who study art and music are more likely to succeed than those who do not.

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Claim: Scholastic art and music programs are so important that the government should fund those programs in schools that cannot afford them.

Reason: Students who study art and music are more likely to succeed than those who do not.

 So, In present time music and art is also important for the all students, then the school are tech the music but it’s not afforded the instruments so the government are provide the funds and provide the some personal loans etc. But study is also most important for the students and her future. Parents are also agree with the statement because the study is most important for his child careers. But some students talent is good in the art and music and other activity. Then, I’m agree with the statement and sometime not agree with this statement.

 First of all the claim is the school is not afford to the music and art related teaching, because

The school are also provide to the digital technology study then this time already is buy the new technology the after the school’s buying for the musical instruments but is not afforded because the musical instrument is so expensive. But in present time music and art is very important for the students and his future. Then the government is providing the some fund and subsidies for buying to the musical and are related instruments. So, it’s a good for the school and students. But some time schools are cheated to the governments and students.

Ex. The schools are gave to the government money but not buying the instruments.so it’s some time bed to the governments and students.

Sometimes the mostly students are only teach to the art and music and his not interested to teach the study.so, its bed for the students future and his career. But this time these students are set to the mind then art and music are more likely to success for her life. Parents are also supported to those students. And some students mind the study is more likely to succeed for her life.

So, finally I’m agree with this claim but some reasons and not agree with some reasons. Because the art and music is also important to the students and it’s a good for the future.

Students are also succeed to teach the music and art because in present time the creativity is most useful for the students.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...d the instruments so the government are provide the funds and provide the some personal...
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Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...t are provide the funds and provide the some personal loans etc. But study is also m...
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Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...udents and her future. Parents are also agree with the statement because the study is...
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Line 1, column 412, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...portant for his child careers. But some students talent is good in the art and music and...
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Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'afforded'.
Suggestion: afforded
...t of all the claim is the school is not afford to the music and art related teaching, ...
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Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...teaching, because The school are also provide to the digital technology study then th...
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Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the after the'. Did you mean 'after the'?
Suggestion: after the
... time already is buy the new technology the after the school's buying for the musical in...
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Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...e. Then the government is providing the some fund and subsidies for buying to the mu...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: GAVE_GIVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...ts and students. Ex. The schools are gave to the government money but not buying ...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...ts and students. Ex. The schools are gave to the government money but not buying ...
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Line 13, column 19, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
...od for the future. Students are also succeed to teach the music and art because in p...
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Line 13, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tivity is most useful for the students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, then, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 0.0 11.3162921348 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 58.6224719101 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7520661157 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44714017126 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 215.323595506 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.305785123967 0.4932671777 62% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.7548584904 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8333333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94444444444 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29030335096 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121331251548 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600446478425 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177539145542 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465509879851 0.0667264976115 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.38706741573 78% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 100.480337079 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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