Claim: Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's major field of study.
Reason: Acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
University is one of the most important parts of a student’s life. The only thing students need to do in university is learning as much as they can. Of course, it is a good thing if students can take a lot of courses out of their majors. But should universities require all the students to do this compulsory? There are both positive and negative aspects of this claim. In my opinion, I disagree with the claim that every student should take a variety of courses outside the majors for two reasons.
To begin with, it is true that there are many advantages if students can learn knowledge out of the major field. Because the majors interact with others a lot nowadays, if we want to do something better, we do need to know different kinds of knowledge. For instance, Apple’s CEO Steve Jobs did not just know things about computers, he also has a deep comprehension of arts, so he can design the classic iPhone and let many people like it. This example illustrates that knowledge of different major fields can benefit us to a large extent.
However, we should not require every student to do what the claim says because there are also a lot of students who just like their own majors. And it is also possible to succeed if they just study in their own major fields. For instance, the students who are learning computer science. They can just increase their ability in coding because when they graduate, they do not have to think anything about design or the hardware or something else, the only thing they need to do is to finish the program. And they can also get a lot of money just by coding. So this example tells us that it is ok if we do not know anything about other academic disciplines.
Moreover, we can not know whether acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated or not. Because we can not define people have become truly educated. The only person who can define this is ourselves. If we thought it will be enough to just learn knowledge of our own majors, then we can also say this is the best way to become truly educated for us.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...st way to become truly educated or not. Because we can not define people have become tr...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, for instance, of course, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52230971129 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45229208536 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456692913386 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0735787352 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.15 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265126606456 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958578453282 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871424970526 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171314223816 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881145167969 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...st way to become truly educated or not. Because we can not define people have become tr...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, for instance, of course, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52230971129 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45229208536 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456692913386 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0735787352 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.15 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265126606456 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958578453282 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0871424970526 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171314223816 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881145167969 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.