Claim: We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from those whose views contradict our own.
Reason: Disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
“The test of a first-rate intelligence is the ability to hold the opposite ideas at the same time while retain the ability to function,” said F. Scott Fitzgerald, the great author of The Great Gatsby. This author unequivocally support this line of thinking, believing that the ability of dealing with contradictory thoughts help one escape the trap of confirmation bias and achieve better-structured ideas as well as innovation. Being able to learn from people with conflicting ideas is one of the best approaches to do so.
Multiple psychological experiments show that people are prone to stick to their existing positions, selecting and interpreting information in a way that can confirm their prior personal beliefs. Given such a tendency, focusing on communicating with people with similar ideas may indeed do more harm than good to us, for we then incline to immerse deeper into our already biased positions, fallaciously imagine that the perspective we hold toward the world is the only right way to view it. On the contrary, if we dare to let ourselves be exposed to others with different, even contradictory views, at the risk of being repudiated, we may be provided with precious changes to let our flowed logic of thinking be challenged, which is by no means able to be provided by a homogeneous social group.
Moreover, connecting to people of different thoughts and various backgrounds not only enable us to better our thinking process, but also make us more creative. A book called Medici Effect explains this phenomena in detail, explaining how the Medici Family in Florence, though not intend the Renaissance, by supported people coming from multiple areas, with different talents, indeed contribute to this grand turning point of history. Having connection with people that see the world from a very different angle from us can actually inspire us to think in a more innovative way, and sometimes, the most groundbreaking ideas could be given birth from one of these dynamic interacting situations.
On the flip side, some may argue that confronting conflicting thoughts could cause stress and thus hinder learning. The author would nevertheless rebut that without the stress of letting one’s thoughts to be challenge so as to be refined, there is no way to come up with a more sophisticated, better grounded idea. It is not good to be so sure about one’s own idea until it has be challenged by conflicting ideas and proved to be sustainable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'first-rate intelligence'.
Suggestion: first-rate intelligence
“The test of a first-rate intelligence is the ability to hold the opposite ide...
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Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e. A book called Medici Effect explains this phenomena in detail, explaining how the...
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Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... letting one’s thoughts to be challenge so as to be refined, there is no way to come up ...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
... sure about one’s own idea until it has be challenged by conflicting ideas and pro...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng ideas and proved to be sustainable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, thus, well, while, as to, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10837438424 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99427572331 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566502463054 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.6767594763 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.538461538 118.986275619 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2307692308 23.4991977007 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 5.21951772744 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135200631262 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471030929339 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041094964895 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0773631681811 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039309487586 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.