Claim We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from those whose views contradict our own Reason Disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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Claim: We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from those whose views contradict our own.
Reason: Disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

People's perspectives differ in various ways depending on their prior backgrounds or their characteristics. While some may accord to our opinion, some may oppose to our opinions and unless it is regarding about scientific facts, it is difficult to decide that only one opinion must be right. I believe that people can learn from both according and opposing views and the reasons I believe upholds my claim will be discussed with further details below.
First of all, it is clear that by people can enhance themselves with those they share views with. Even though it is based on the same view, others may be much more experienced or are more erudite and because knowledge is infinite, there is no limit in achieving new knowledge. Discussing each other's knowledge may also give them the possibility to notice what they had overlooked. I would like to mention Baptists as an example. Baptist is one of the religion which diverged from Catholic and is known to be found in China and expanded to South Korea. At first, in South Korea, only a minority of people believed in such religion and many alienated the minority asserting that they are abominations of the pure religion. However, the minority who shared the same views gathered together every day and the senior would share newly achieved information freshly brought from China. Other novice believers became just as erudite as the senior believer and later expanded the religion to other laypeople. Eventually, majority of the people in South Korea are currently Baptists and has now become the most powerful religion in the nation. If the people who were Baptists in the past had not shared each other's information and constantly educated themselves from each other, it would have brought out a different consequence.
Furthermore, people are also able to notice the defects in their perspectives and broaden their knowledge by sharing their views with those who oppose. People who contradict also has a reasonable evidence that bolsters their claim. Even though some of their evidences may be an assumption or are unwarranted, still people would be able to either fortify their claim or change their perspective by sharing their reasons. For example, the environmentalists viewed that the environment is worth saving by spending every penny and effort on preserving it, while technology believers claimed that enhancing technology should be the prior concern regardless of nature being endangered by negative human actions. As people from both distinguishing points of view continuously discussed each other's view, they eventually converged into one decision which turned out be an efficient way in enhancing both technology and the environment.
To sum up, people are obviously able to enhance their knowledge from someone who is more erudite and shares the same point of view. However, they can also fortify their claims in a much more reasonable way or either divert it into a better claim by discussing their views with those who are in opposition. Due to such reasons, I believe that people can learn from both points of view.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 293, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...chieving new knowledge. Discussing each others knowledge may also give them the possib...
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Line 2, column 1198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...aptists in the past had not shared each others information and constantly educated the...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, while, for example, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2584.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 506.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10671936759 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73444094347 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482213438735 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 814.5 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7701987636 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.047619048 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0952380952 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22495761025 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807462959432 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675166367426 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166484689483 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612167417885 0.0667264976115 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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