Colleges and universities should require their students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Many students study abroad these days with the purpose of learning to think in different perspectives and experiencing diverse cultures. It would help students to be more flexible in the way they think and edify their insular minds. However, it needs to be debated whether it would be beneficial to all the students. I believe that having the experience of studying in a foreign country would be beneficial, but not for all the students. Furthermore, forcing students does not seem like a apropos idea.
First of all, for students who are majoring in studies which requires knowledge of and have the ability to adapt to diverse cultures, it would be extremely advantageous if colleges or universities provide such students an opportunity to study in foreign countries. To be specific, fields such as design, business, and literature differs in many countries based on its culture. Only learning them by theory and actually seeing and experiencing the diversity could have excessive difference. However, for studies that are similar throughout the countries, such as engineering or natural science, studying abroad does not make much difference. If it is not beneficial, why bother to leave their home country and study abroad? It takes extensive amount of money and effort in adapting and preparing to live in a different country.
Moreover, having students to study in a foreign country may seem compulsory and puts them in a lot of pressure. Being pressured to do something one does not want to do may lead to receiving excessive amount of stress and causing them to falter in their study. Students who does not like to be put in new environments and have a hard time adapting to such environment would constantly fear of having to leave their comfortable environment. This could cause students to act in a problematic way or even have to see a psychiatrist to eliminate their stress and anxiety. Forcing students to do certain things is never a good. Just leaving it for the students to decide whether they would like to study in foreign countries would be better than forcing them.
To sum up, some might say because it is beneficial for someone to experience diverse cultures and perspectives, it is necessary to study in foreign countries. However, it is not up to colleges or universities to force students to do certain things. While it may be advantageous to study abroad, it is plausible only for students who are majoring in certain types of field. Also, forcing students to study abroad even for those who does not like to be would cause students to receive pressure and a lot of stress, which may lead to students acting out or lacking in their study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 488, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Consider replacing "in a problematic way" with adverb for "problematic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92888888889 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8248072151 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446666666667 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0307951412 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.619047619 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190923920484 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671612443965 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495131814127 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137177797472 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283629102387 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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