college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interests them rather than the courses that seem more likely to lead to jobs.
As the students prepare for embarking on college education, the first question that comes to their mind is - what course should they persue in college? The decision they take at this point is the one of the most crucial decisions in their lives as it determines the work they do for the rest of their lives. The prompt suggests that students should be induced to choose the course of their own interest rather choosing those which will readily fetch them jobs. I agree with the prompt and feel that they give more priority to their interests for the following reasons.
Firstly, what may seem a job that has high demand at some point may not have the same demand as the time progresses. Thus, to choose a course based solely on high probability of getting a job is to take a short-term perspective, one that will likely backfire. For example, let us take the case of Oil and Gas Industry. Presently, the world mostly runs on oil and gas. These resources are indespensable as they are used as fuel for every machine we can ever imagine. Therefore, one cannot be considered fatuous if he chooses a course related to extraction of oil and gas from earth to secure a job soon after the course. However, will the demand for such jobs will as unchanging as the gravity of the earth? One would answer yes if only is blind to the developments that are taking place presently in the world. We are increasingly turning to renewable sources of energy like solar energy, hydro energy etc. Thus, it is blatant that the demand for jobs related to oil and gas industry will recede as we make more and more progress towards harnessing renewable sources of energy. And those who chose to do those jobs will soon be earning subliminal salary or will be unemployed.
Secondly, even if there are jobs whose demand never ebbs, one should still choose courses based on their interest as fervor for a job plays a vital role in one's happiness. In contrast, if a person pragmatically chooses to do an IT job putting aside his interest for acting, it is guaranteed that he will start vexing about his job. He might go everday to the office only to come back home listlessly in the evening and feeling depressed thinking about what his life would have been had to chose to pay attention to his interests. Thus, it is wise to choose courses based only on interest and not based on external factors like availabity of jobs or the salaries.
However, one might argue that in today's world, there is a proliferation of so many jobs that are in high demand and each student has myriad chooses to choose from. This scenario gives all the more reason to choose fields based on one's interest as they are equally likely to get a job in the field of their interest as well as give their best and feel complacent.
To recapitulate, one should choose a course based on their passion as it is not plausible that a job will poses high demand for eternity and the zealous to do a job plays a vital role on the overall happiness of the person. With the proliferation of high demand jobs in various fields, one will easily find job of their choose and interest.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 157, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Line 6, column 226, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...if a person pragmatically chooses to do an IT job putting aside his interest for acti...
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Line 6, column 232, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'jobs'?
Suggestion: jobs
...erson pragmatically chooses to do an IT job putting aside his interest for acting, ...
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Line 11, column 107, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'pose'
Suggestion: pose
... as it is not plausible that a job will poses high demand for eternity and the zealou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in contrast, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2569.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 563.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56305506217 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44832605319 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45648312611 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5376985029 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.695652174 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4782608696 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229317072496 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733437301318 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589660463527 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141086792313 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024601727305 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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