Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
As superficial as it may seem, high grades, in many people's opinions, means intelligence and better education in a person. However, this is a fallacious understanding in our society's values. Only fighting for high grades but forgetting the pursuit of truth and wisdom is meaningless; it merely increases unnecessary competitions and hurts cooperation and friendship.
High grades, or even high academic performance, do not indicate that a student is smarter and more talented than other with lower grades. In fact, it only means that those students spend more time on studying what is required at school while the others might be stronger in other areas. In many Asian countries, China and Japan, for example, their grading systems only focuses on study of their own language, mathematics, and science. Other subjects like arts and music, even physical education, are only considered extra curricular classes. Students with interests in those areas may be condemned and forced to study what they are supposed to, the majors that can give them high grades. In terms of diversity in education, competition for high grades definitely destroy the purpose of learning in all levels.
Furthermore, the environment, including teachers, parents, and peers, will also highly influence the mental states of students who are in such an education system. As they are aiming for high academic performance, some students are more complacent after scoring an "A," because teachers will acclaim their academic excellence and parents will praise them with money awards. On the contrary, others with a "B" will be looked down upon, or even feel like they are the disgrace of their family. In this case, the higher achievers will have high self-esteem while those on the lower end of the curve may further lose their interest in studying.
Indeed, the grading system is not all that bad. In some cases, such as math contests or the Olympics, where people are looking for the most eminent person in a certain area, such rigorous competition is required in order to differentiate candidates. In the event of Olympics, the human beings are competing to represent the best of our kind, proving that we can be better in physical strength and endurance. Similarly, the math contests are to find the most talented mathematician who may further push for another revolution in the human history. However, in education at all levels such system is inapplicable and not healthy.
In summary, the competition for higher academic performance in certain studies is not necessary. In fact, it hurts the further expansion of students' interests in other fields that are not the requirements in the system. In addition, it also brings negative influence into students' mental health, resulting in a reverse effect in learning. The best use of such competition is at certain contests where people are willing to accept the pressure from competing against each other, striving for the best deserved one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...more complacent after scoring an 'A,' because teachers will acclaim their ac...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ey awards. On the contrary, others with a 'B' will be looked down upon,...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...are not the requirements in the system. In addition, it also brings negative influ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, while, for example, in addition, in fact, in summary, such as, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2518.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24583333333 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81186721276 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502083333333 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9041206265 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.454545455 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141965432575 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0477290230072 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477120154433 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831582249317 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240650706271 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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