Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The proponent claims that in face of competing for higher grades, the quality of education is degrading. This statement is like a two-sided coin which has different outlook. As we all know in any field, sports, art, business, etc competition is the prominent factor that bolsters the quality of that field. But this same competition can have serious consequences on one’s health who is thriving for excellence. My views are presented in the following paragraphs.
To start with, in the education system, a student is assessed on the basis of his grades. Unfortunately, grades are the factor on which the success of the student is defined. In such a scenario, students are faced with the challenge to score high grades. This gives rise to the competition among students to compete for higher grades. A student who aims to enter a prestigious university will definitely prove his calibre by scoring higher grades.
The next reason is the lack of motivation which can be nullified by the competition. As today’s world is a fast-paced place, student tends to get bored by the education and looses all interest. Competition for grades can motivate them to learn and take interest in the education. As one receives praise and this felling instils in them a sense of confidence, children are ought to compete for higher grades.
On the contrary, competition is not always benign. It leads to mental stress and gives rise to anxiety. The constant fear of scoring higher marks pressurises the children which is detrimental in such a young age. Also, it might lead them to undertake unfair practices which will seriously damage their integrity. So, competition should be healthy and should not affect someone’s mental health.
In the attempt to score higher grades, children are inclined to learn the facts without even understanding them. This seriously degrades the quality of education. Simple learning facts and vomiting them on the paper will only help to get higher grades but will not help in understanding. This will possess a bigger problem in future while performing the actual job. For instance, a student has learned the fact that engine needs air to work but didn’t understand the reason behind it. He will face a huge problem while working on engine later on as he is unaware of the principles on which it’s working is based. In this way the quality of education is deteorating.
To sum it up, though competition leads to significant improvements in any field, it should be healthy. A healthy competition is the one which leads to improvement without putting stress on the people who are making improvements. Simply learning facts may lead to achieve higher grades but will not provide any useful results.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, while, as to, for instance, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05530973451 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79418647765 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482300884956 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.4997143907 60.3974514979 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.7931034483 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5862068966 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03448275862 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201799182298 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573472664976 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038855572958 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110866249832 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360081896956 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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