Cooperation then competition

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Cooperation then competition

n 19th century, Charles Darwin gave his theory of survival of the fittest. The position taken by Darwin was novel and opened gates for understanding human behaviour better. Today, we understand that humans are inherently competitive to survive and later thrive. This need to be better than others has also been posited by the psychological school of thought- psychoanalysis. The need to be competitive apart from being congenital in nature, is also instilled in young children since an early age. From kid's beauty paegents to classroom activities; being competitive is considered imperative to human growth. The prompt, however, takes a different stance. It suggests the need to be inculcate cooperation in young minds than competition for more successful leadership roles which benefit society. I partially agree with this stance, and argue so for 3 reasons.
It is said that, those who ignore history are bound to repeat the mistakes of past. And this proverb holds true for this prompt as well. History has given us numerous examples of leaders who in their quest to become the unconquerable, ultimately faced their defeat. For instance, Adolf Hitler the most nefarious known leader to mankind, instilled competitive drive after the defeat of Germany in World War I. It is no secret his quest to prove his country and Aryan race as the best ethnicity in the world, Adolf Hitler committed atrocious crimes against humanity. Therefore, while competition is significant for progress; when negative emotions such as rage, jealousy and hatred get involved in the picture- the results are disastrous for society and for the individual. Hiter's end as well all know was nothing short of ignominy and disgrace.
Instilling cooperation on the other hand, produces results which are not only productive for the individual but for the society. For instance, during the Covid-19 pandemic, in India the lack of cooperation between Health, Transport, Aviation and other ministeries resulted in millions of death. The need to be recognized as the better ministery came at the cost of common people's life. However, if there was a sense of cooperation among leaders, the results definitely would have been far more fruitful and beneficial. Moreover, seeing the lack of cooperation among the ministeries, the Indian government introduced a new law altogether to promote better cooperation. The incidence highlights the need to instill harmony and cooperation among the young minds.
Further, the virtue of cooperation has positive results on personallity development of children as well. Research shows that children who are more cooperative tend to be more liked among peers and tend to be more successful. Competition, also tend to kill inquisitiveness and passion of fledglings. Today's tech-based giants are the nonpariel of that. Media reports time and again have accused big tech based companies like Facebook, Twitter, or Amazon of crushing small based start-ups to cut down competition.
However, some may argue that promoting cooperative may reduce the competitive drive among the people and thus lead to deficit of leaders. It is also possible that majority of the human race stops trying to exceed. Unfortunately, such arguments are fallible and ignore the innate need for competition among humans. They forget that humans even today are involved in competition at every insignificant level. They forget that while competition may help one to reach at the top position, but after that it is cooperation that helps them survive. For instance, in a closed room of board members, it is not competition that helps the head thrive but cooperation with other involved members. For example, a competitive young adult may secure a job position at a competitive company but after the job selection, it is his cooperative virtue that will aid in success. History is the witness that leaders who worked solely on the competitive drive, ultimately failed to win at the race of life and hearts of people. Napolean, Alexander The Great, and Stalin are the exemplar of it. However, this is not to say that competitions should be totally abandoned for cooperation, for competition is significant to reach towards the goal but at the end of the road; the child should also realize the importance of cooperation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3604.0 2235.4752809 161% => OK
No of words: 689.0 442.535393258 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23076923077 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12335920045 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90085496425 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 362.0 215.323595506 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525399129173 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 1143.0 704.065955056 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.2370786517 183% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6315692174 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4054054054 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6216216216 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91891891892 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262086163589 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063583907978 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648773507478 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14129931677 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875006716073 0.0667264976115 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 178.0 100.480337079 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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