The author contends that critical judgment of an expert has greater strength in its value. At first glance this claim seems appealing, however, the following essay will argue that why this may not always be the case since non-expert’s enthusiasm could have higher competitive advantages than experts in some cases.
Admittedly, the author’s assertion that expert’s in-depth knowledge could make critical judgment to have great value. More often, experts make greater contributions than beginners or laypersons in a field of inquiry with their long standing experience and know-hows in that field. They are the by-products of expert’s accumulated studies and it is likely for experts to be exposed to discovering more efficient problem solving. For example, Edwin Hubble, an American astronomer who is recognized as one of the most important observational cosmologists of the 20th century, is well-known for his great invention, the Hubble telescope. Important fact is that this invention was made by his lifelong dedication of meticulous research. Without his punctilious spirit as an expert, the Hubble telescope might have not been created which could have led to the discovery of Milky Way and its surrounding galaxies. Thus, non-experts cannot always exceed experts only with their passion alone. Expert’s long standing knowledge plays a crucial role in making paramount progress.
Nevertheless, beginners in that field could outperform better than experts in some cases. They are likely to come up with creative and unprecedented ideas, while experts constrain themselves with their rigid boundary of knowledge. There are some examples that some of the history’s great discoveries were made by non-experts in their field. Jeffrey Bezos, an American business investor and the CEO of Amazon, first started his business in a garage. Although Amazon was originally an online bookstore, he had always planned to expand to other products. Eventually, Amazon became one of the most influential e-commerce market and this all started from a beginner in this field who had innovative business plan which no one has ever tried before. Without his technological entrepreneur’ insight, the growth of e-commerce may have not come to its current state. Therefore, beginners could be said to have superior side compared with experts in a sense that they might have more innovative thoughts.
In sum, the statement seems slightly unpersuasive as it stands. While at first impression, the claim seems to be mutually exclusive but it turns out to have some merit since expert’s ceaseless effort and long standing knowledge plays a crucial role to making substantial progress. However, the beginner’s innovative insights sometimes are more suitable to modern trend because their ideas are not fettered by any conventional ideas and could produce bigger advantages to us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...knowledge. There are some examples that some of the history's great discoveries were m...
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Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
...the beginner's innovative insights sometimes are more suitable to modern trend because t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57110609481 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07611920496 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532731376975 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 760.5 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5518634731 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.523809524 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193283386216 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615189626958 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464966674694 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116783423687 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528029425342 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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