In this memo, the speaker claims that providing cooperative environment to build leadership of young people is the best way. While at first glance, the claim seems reasonable and well-supported empirically, nevertheless, it is unsuitable to compare both value of cooperation and competition given that their values can be variable, thus the statement is unpersuasive on several grounds.
To begin with, modern society is filled with competition. As it is one of the most efficient way to discover talented people in any aspects including leadership. With best tactics, individuals and groups can outperform and their tactics could be appreciated well in competition. For example, most of the well-known football clubs rear young players and put them in harsh competition. Among them, coaches find a suitable one in each position including team captain. This captain position is not discovered by just looking teammate's cooperation but it has been examined by several criteria. Therefore, the most efficient way to prepare their leadership is likely to be built by competition.
However, competition can taint the real value of its rearing process. Anything with excessive degree should be avoided because it can cause some unnecessary conflicts. Rather than witnessing or tolerating arrogance and disregard, young people should learn how to coax others and make encouraging atmosphere pursuing to make their best outcomes. Related with the above-mentioned example, Casillas, ex-goalkeeper of Real Madrid, showed great conciliating skill among national football teammates of whom easily fought with each other for Spanish regionalism. He was raised in exposure of various regional effects from his family; although he was born in Madrid, he used to practice in Barcelona.
Nevertheless, the degree of competition among young people is diverse domestically and internationally. For example, general tendency is that while a society of small population is likely to cooperate to make accomplishments, one with large population is likely to prefer competition in order to sort out outstanding people and perform efficiently to make the same result. Moreover, if the country is under capitalism, it is likely to have more competition than cooperation as economy is ran by the former system. Thus, the means to have prospective leader should be considered in wide range.
In sum, while at first impression the claim that cooperation is the best way to build leadership for young people seems mutually exclusive, it appears they are not. Thus the speaker’s claim has some merit. Nevertheless, competition can be also the most efficient way to find a suitable leader through severe examination. In the final analysis, the correctness of the speaker’s claim should be considered in case-by-case basis.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 60, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ern society is filled with competition. As it is one of the most efficient way to ...
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Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'With the best'.
Suggestion: With the best
...le in any aspects including leadership. With best tactics, individuals and groups can out...
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Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teammates'' or 'teammate's'?
Suggestion: teammates'; teammate's
...ition is not discovered by just looking teammates cooperation but it has been examined by...
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Line 7, column 490, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'run'.
Suggestion: run
...petition than cooperation as economy is ran by the former system. Thus, the means t...
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Line 9, column 167, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...lly exclusive, it appears they are not. Thus the speaker's claim has some merit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2384.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5313225058 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18921307593 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533642691415 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 737.1 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.3267602261 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.363636364 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5909090909 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16131870457 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502319067142 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437998952249 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913826650391 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375891774172 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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