The drawbacks of traditional energy sources means that they are not a long-term solution to the problem of meeting ever-increasing energy needs.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasinoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these consideration shape your position.
As the author has suggested in the sentence above, since in the next years we will need even more energy, we cannot count totally on conventional energy sources as a solution because of their serious disadvantages. These ones have a seriously bad influence on our planet’s health both economically and environmentally.
Firstly, even though it could be argued that we should continue using traditional energy sources because we all know well how to manage them and we have much experience in their usage, I am strongly convinced that this is the right moment to make a revolutionary change. As a matter of fact using fuel and gasoil we are damaging even more deeply our planet health and we are creating cicatrix which would emerg in about 50 years. For this reason, the need to adopt some eco-friendly way to product energy, such as solar panel and eolic system, must have the highest priority.
Furthermore these systems will make possible not only the halt of the pollution of our planet but also it will bring benefits on World’s economy. While many could argue that the initial cost needed for installing this kind of systems are too high, we should consider them just as an investiment on the future. Indeed, once installed, these energy generators will need just a little of money for their care and after a quite short period it become a kind of autonomous energy-delivering system. An exampls of what I am saying are the increasing quantity of industries which are adopting these systems in order to save money and that after just two years are fully satisfied of their choice.
In conclusion, even though nowadays we are all used of producing energy with traditional instruments I strongly believe that we should now adopt ecological systems which allows both to prevent the health of our planet while producing an higher amount of energy and to save money in this field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: THESE_ONES[1]
Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'These' instead.
Suggestion: These
...because of their serious disadvantages. These ones have a seriously bad influence on our p...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...em, must have the highest priority. Furthermore these systems will make possible not on...
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Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... will make possible not only the halt of the pollution of our planet but also it ...
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Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
... care and after a quite short period it become a kind of autonomous energy-delivering ...
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Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...he health of our planet while producing an higher amount of energy and to save mon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, so, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90965732087 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70181655482 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551401869159 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0984573287 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.6 118.986275619 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1 23.4991977007 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9 5.21951772744 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120230681564 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494259053695 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394383925108 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0832295968251 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212486112843 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.8420337079 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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