Selecting a field of study as career is a very tough decision that has far reaching effects om the career of an individual. The prompt proposes that educational institutions should discourage students from taking up fields of study in which the instutions asses the students might not succed. Undoubtedly, such a policy is justified, as it is only a logical extension of the roles that educational institutions take up. Not only implementing such a policy would help children save their precious time and money that they other wise spend on their costly education only to drop out it later, but would also help students to get in fields of study in which they are more likely to succed in. Although, it is questionable how effective an institution might be at judging success of an candidate for a potetial career, such claims appear weak when we consider that educational institutions have better insights about children and they can judge them better then students hemselves on various aspects like pyschology, academic performance and aptitude.
Education is a very costly affair and the years in which a person pursues education are also very important as this time is bound to not come back. So, it is preferrable to select a career path carefully after judging own capabilities carefully. Taking a career path after taking counsel from an educational counsellor would help students in avoiding potentially bad academic careers and take up careers in which they are more likely to suceed.As a result, this saves a lot of children from dropping of from educational courses later, as many children take up courses in which either are not able to perform well or they loose interest in it as it is quite easy for them. Not only educational institutions save students from potential trauma but also helps them save money and time that they would spend on courses from which they would drop of later. It is estimated by Federal Education Board that among students that drop of from courses later a whopping eighty percent blamed bad career decisions that were taken earlier in thier career as the reason for dropping-off later.
The capacity of educational institutions as an appropriate judge for judging career paths for students is frequently questioned. However, this claim falls apart when understand the various factors involved in student counselling. To begin with, chidren are naive and inexperienced in judging their potential and are always prone to either underestimate or overestimate their capabilities. Moreover, educational institutions with thier vast experince in dealing with children everyday on a large scale a much more suitable candidate to suggest careers for them. As expected, these institutions can leverage their experiene to judge candidates on several factors like student pyschology, aptitude, character, and academic performance to help them avoid fields of study that might lead too failure in career later. In a recent survey conducted by Minda(a reseacrh institute ) it was found that students who took up career paths on their own whim had a meager two percent chance of success in the choosen career. On the other hand, students who had taken career paths after taking consultation with their educational institutions had a wopping ninety five percent career success rate.
In conclusion we can say that, choosing fields of study is a very significant career decision and educational institutes should play an active role in it by warning students from potentially dangerous career paths.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 522, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: otherwise
...their precious time and money that they other wise spend on their costly education only to...
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Line 1, column 780, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...titution might be at judging success of an candidate for a potetial career, such c...
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Line 1, column 947, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
Suggestion: better than
... about children and they can judge them better then students hemselves on various aspects l...
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Line 1, column 954, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...children and they can judge them better then students hemselves on various aspects l...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...in which they are more likely to suceed.As a result, this saves a lot of children ...
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Suggestion:
...y conducted by Mindaa reseacrh institute it was found that students who took up c...
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Suggestion:
...nety five percent career success rate. In conclusion we can say that, choosing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2964.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 570.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83352614628 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450877192982 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 933.3 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.2741154994 60.3974514979 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.666666667 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214147973571 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836660716323 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575170970656 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148420292949 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448937487931 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 14.1392134831 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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