The prompt proposes that conventional educational systems limit our minds and spirits rather than liberating them.
The thought advocated by the prompt is unequivocally justified. History is witness to this claim, there have been only a handful of free thinkers in past centuries. Formal education has always worked to fix people in to well defined roles and predetermined thinking patterns. To expect that such a system would produce a myriad of free thinkers and liberate minds of it subjects is not realistic.
Formal education traces its roots from the education system of the 14-15th centuries. At the time education was aimed at making subjects subservient to the ruling monarchs, often knowledge provided to the people were limited to certain areas and monarchs were presented in the light of god to make their authority unquestionable. This system evolved with time and today institutions have taken place of the monarchs. Education today is focussed at creating a society that does not question its institutions and accept the norms they push for society, this is complemented by limiting the affairs of public to some specific areas so they dont poke in affairs of the elite and challange the power structure of the society. As we see the system has been designed from the begining to mould people in a particular way of thinking and to ensure they don't even by mistake cross the red line.
Irrespective of cultures education has been equated to with higher incomes. This linking with monetary benefit however necessary has motivated academicians to make education more oriented towards skills and knowledge that could help people get jobs in the real world. This intrinsic motivation has taken over the entire education system and subjects like spirituality and philosophy that could help liberate minds and soul by developing individual personalities with their vast knowledge of self-reform practices, have been completely pushed out of regular school education. The aims of education have know permanently shifted to make humans an obedient workforce.
In conclusion we can say that formal education has worked to restrain our spirits and minds directly ocassionaly and indirectly persistently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86431243308 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557142857143 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3063171201 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0664510090861 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0255075103157 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0164336493837 0.0758088955206 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0368571927004 0.150359130593 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125230031788 0.0667264976115 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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