The prompt reccomends that the government should step in to provide tution aid to students who are able to secure admissions in universities but are incapable of paying their tution. Undoubtedly, this point of view is completely justified as providing equitable acess to healthcare and education is a must for any government . Definetly making college tution affordable to a large section of society is a moral responsibility of any goverment and such initiatives are complemented with several indirect benefits of such as high HDI(Human Development Index) and low crime rates. Though the cost of such an initiative is questionable but the boost to economy from a larger highly educated workforce cannot be neglected.
Equitable access to higher education is not only a key indicator of progress for any country but also a moral responsibility of any progressive nation. Providing aid to students who secure admission to universities ensures that a large section of public has access to Higher Education. This directly translates to a larger highly qualified workforce that goes on to provide a strong boost to the economy by adding to the numbers of qualified professionals, different economic sectors of the economy can increase their operations and carter to a larger customer base which increases their revenue in turn. Singapore made its bet on education in 1950s when it got its independence, since then Singapore has seen an unprecdented 12 % year on year growth till 2017 . The country that was once a union of fishing villages and a few cities now provides logistics and financial services globaly.
Apart from Monetary benefits, there are several indirect benefits of having a highly educated population. A highly educated population finds it easy to secure lucrative white-collar jobs. Hence, the crime rate from atleast organized crime drops severly as less people are now incentivized to join organised gangs. Additionally, it is easy for people with higher education to understand various complex goverment policies like banking reforms, and Tax bills which remains esoteric for most other people who did not pursue a higher education. Consequently, these people can choose to accept or reject such complex policies with vehement protests .This not only limits the powers of the political elite, it also in essence safegaurds the spirit of democracy. Taking the example of Sweden and Gwenda(a country in the east) we can see that Sweden is leaps and Bounds ahead on all human development, freedom of expression, public safety and wealth equality indicators. While most Swedes have completed some form of higher education most natives of Gwenda have barely completed school. Most natives in Gwenda take up traditional jobs or turn to organised crime whereas Swedes are mostly employed in well-paying jobs. Additionally, as the population is not well educated the political elite of the Gwenda is able to easily pass laws and bills that favor it by using confusing and complex technical jagron which most people of the country are unable to comprehend. A poorly educated population makes the perfect subject for any repressive regime.
In conclusion we can say that providing aid to complete university education is vital for any nation as it has benefits beyond monetary matters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, so, then, well, whereas, while, apart from, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2772.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 525.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90559439098 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 909.9 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9512093289 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.6 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173882935055 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530371883998 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461852566825 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114647294984 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304330183557 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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