Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Education plays an essential role in student's life by nurturing them with valuable qualities and introducing them as well-rounded individuals in this competitive world. When a youngster chooses their major field of study in the curriculum, it becomes a vital part of their entire life. Therefore, this decision should be taken with a clear mind and only after carefully overviewing all the available alternatives. I am of the opinion that the university should guide students while selecting their core subjects for lucrative careers as well as they should give freedom to the students for finding a career that is based on their individual characteristics.
First of all, university students are unaware of the job opportunities in the advanced, fast pacing, and changing surroundings. They just enter into an institute after graduating from a high school education which does not include essential courses that are required for future career opportunities. For example, an art or commerce student might have no idea regarding other fields like I.T., bio-engineering, medicines, sports, etc. If the university provides a platform for students to introduce various profitable career options with their pros and cons, then students can definitely have an idea about the course options that the university is offering. Further, a student from a commerce background might develop an interest in photography class and would opt for photography as a lucrative career.
On the contrary, Students should follow their dreams and choose subjects which are based on their own interests, characteristics, and talents. While one must consider choosing a job for the betterment of lifestyle, one should not forget the happiness during the process. Indeed, Satisfaction of working, following dreams and goals are the most important attributes of a peaceful lifestyle. For instance, recent medical studies have cited that our mental health is directly proportional to our work-life. If you are not enjoying your job then it will not reflect on your health. Thus, it is of utmost importance to give priority to your interest so as to flourish in your desired career.
To sum up, the meanings of the term "lucrative careers" can vary depending upon the perception of an individual. Students who take their personal talents seriously are more prone to be satisfied. Maybe we should redefine how we see life, and that should start in schools by encouraging students to follow a field of study that is can maximize their qualities and what they feel comfortable with, instead of just aiming for a career that is more "lucrative". More than being rich, it's important to live a life without feeling tired after completing a job.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...directly proportional to our work-life. If you are not enjoying your job then it w...
^^
Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...tance to give priority to your interest so as to flourish in your desired career. To ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, as well as, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3233256351 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10379893614 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565819861432 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2005453572 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.315789474 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 5.21951772744 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297882369784 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807227929519 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567034846665 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17045692852 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04030076168 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 505, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...directly proportional to our work-life. If you are not enjoying your job then it w...
^^
Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...tance to give priority to your interest so as to flourish in your desired career. To ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, as well as, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 433.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3233256351 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10379893614 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565819861432 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2005453572 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.315789474 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 5.21951772744 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297882369784 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807227929519 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567034846665 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17045692852 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04030076168 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.