An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The argument suggests to increase the vitamin A deficiency among the people in the nation of Tagus the government have to engineer a new breed of millet which is high in vitamin A. In this argument, the author have made some unwarranted assumptions which we have to evaluate first. The author did not mention about the subsidy that government is willing to give to the farmers. Also, by how much amount the new breed of millet is to be included. Due to all this parameters, the argument is implausible.
To begin with, the author put forwards the point that by introducing a new breed of millet the vitamin A deficiency among people in Tagus will be improvised. Here, the author fails to tell by what amount the new breed of millet should be included in the fields. Also, the author did not gave an idea if the newly designed millet is going through any human trials or not? Will it be beneficial for the humans or not? Is it suitable for the human beings? Will it be useful to increase the vitamin A level in humans? etc factors need to be explained by the author because we can not tell anything for sure.
In addition to this, the author fails to mention how much subsidy is going to give to the farmers. What are the prices for the newly designed millet? How is it going to help the economical growth of the Tagus? If the government is providing with 50% of subsidy amount and the millet cost more than than amount. In this case, the subsidy is not going to help by any mean to the people of the Tagus.
Furthermore, the author states that as millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. This point is not convincing here. The author fails to explain whether the new variety of millet tastes same as the regular millet or not. Is it same in shape, color, texture, and taste? What if the new millet is artificially developed and tastes very different than the regular one ? People will definitely say no to the new millet then.
While there is nothing wrong to expect that if the Tagus government wants to promote the new variety of vitamin A millet more information regarding this issue is necessary in order to convince critics that how the deficiency of the vitamin A among people will likely to decrease.The author fails to present sufficient information that would persuade more skeptic readers. The argument would have been plausible if author explains some valid evidences.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 1947 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.486 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.369 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.87 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.828 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.478 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sts to increase the vitamin A deficiency among the people in the nation of Tagus ...
^^
Line 1, column 459, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...of millet is to be included. Due to all this parameters, the argument is implausible...
^^^^
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l by what amount the new breed of millet should be included in the fields. Also, ...
^^
Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...in the fields. Also, the author did not gave an idea if the newly designed millet is...
^^^^
Line 3, column 516, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Etc
...increase the vitamin A level in humans? etc factors need to be explained by the aut...
^^^
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ned millet? How is it going to help the economical growth of the Tagus? If the government ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: than
...subsidy amount and the millet cost more than than amount. In this case, the subsidy is no...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: same
...ame as the regular millet or not. Is it same in shape, color, texture, and taste? What if the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...lly developed and tastes very different than the regular one ? People will definitel...
^^^^
Line 9, column 280, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... A among people will likely to decrease.The author fails to present sufficient info...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, while, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 433.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62355658199 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45699921104 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413394919169 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.2276800137 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.08 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.32 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440118254219 0.218282227539 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126315633667 0.0743258471296 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107738155269 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251013864295 0.128457276422 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627832814821 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 12.5979740519 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.