Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Many people have different beliefs about whether young children should be allowed to watch television advertisements or not. I agree with the provided statement the young children are too naive to understand, and often simply copy the things learned from their surroundings.
First and foremost, children aged between two to five is simply put, not very old. They don't have the ability to tell what is good for them and what is not. For example, my three-year-old niece is very interested in television commercials. One day she saw an advertisement for an umbrella, a girl was holding it in the air and was happily flying down towards the ground. Because of this, she tried to mimic this same act in her room causing her to fall on the ground. So the advertisements have a direct impact on young minds. Children don't know how to react to these advertisements, as a result, they just follow what they have seen advertised.
Secondly, I also believe that it would be a mistake to allow young children to see advertisements because they are more likely to make wrong choices for themselves. The company wants to establish its brand value using the creative advertisement. Also, the advertisement industry just wants to sell its products. Due to this fact, young kids easily get attracted to these innovative commercials. For instance, when they see different toys on television, and would definitely demand every toy irrespective of whether they really need that toy which they have seen on television.
Finally, advertisements affect children's health. A high percentage of advertisements targeting children feature candy, fast foods, and snacks, and that exposure to such advertising increases consumption of these products. Due to this, bad eating habits are developed in young children, causing them to eat junk food all the time. Most importantly, studies have shown that product preferences affect children's product purchase requests and that these requests do influence parents' purchasing decisions.
To put it briefly, it is critically important to forbid young children from watching advertisements. They have yet to mature in order to differentiate between right and wrong things. As mentioned, children at that age not ready to make decisions. Also, I feel parents should monitor their children and decide what they should watch on television.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05211726384 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9490720512 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579804560261 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6092829908 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1666666667 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0555555556 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312946653158 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905110841997 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925455115448 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185539076893 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609367222554 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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