Educator should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
An education curriculum is designed for students to achieve certain goals that the educators expect from student after completing the education or graduation. In the nowadays society where we live, there are many career paths that student can choose after graduation and many of them require skills that orthodox curriculums do not afford. Thus, involving students in designing curriculum seems a good idea for two reasons.
Generation living nowadays has found many ways of contributing to the society that our parents would not have thought thanks to the internet. One example of that would be the rise of Youtuber as a profession. One decade ago, people would think of making video and posting it on Youtube as a source of income as inconceivable. Yet, many people nowadays make millions of dollar as content creators on Youtube. The skills set that Youtube content creators need is different from the skills set that what people perceive as normal professions. Many of skills are not taught in old school curriculum such as the ability to read the trend in our society, the ability to promote products, the ability to think outside the box and many more. Thus, finding out what students want is probably a good idea since most of them are usually more literate about what is going on nowadays and applying it to the curriculum will be helpful for them to anticipate the society where they will live in the future.
Moreover, the rigid curriculums that we have in most schools nowadays start to lose its relevance. The number of people who consider school is the most important factor in determining their career decreases slightly every year. With the availability of the Internet, people can almost learn everything on their own. They can easily search any tutorial videos or websites that provide skills they want to learn. For example, there are many cases where companies hire software engineers who do not have any educational background in computer science or engineering. They attained their skills simply by watching tutorial videos. Unless the educators in school listen to their students what they want to learn and give them what they need, it will be unsurprising in the future that people will stop going to formal schools and choose to learn everything by themselves with only one computer in their bedroom.
However, while finding out what students want is important, educators shouldn't offer it just because students want it. What students want is not always necessarily what they need. Without proper and thorough evaluation, including subjects into a curriculum only because students want it will result in incoherence and confusing curriculum. For such reasons explained above, we can conclude that offering what students want in the curriculum with proper evaluation can be proved useful for the students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 71, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...t students want is important, educators shouldnt offer it just because students want it....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15118790497 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60909451737 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481641468683 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0545524981 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.571428571 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09523809524 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182737407675 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590492959226 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647950258375 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132358044619 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841818474917 0.0667264976115 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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