Some people believe it is imperative for individuals living in developed nations to reduce their energy consumption and lead a more sustainable lifestyle, given the evidence for global climate change. Others believe that such drastic lifestyle changes are unwarranted, based on the existing evidence for global climate change.
The problem of global warming has been circulating in our society for decades. While the evidences of global warming happening are crystal-clear, finding the solutions is a nontrivial problem. One factor that played a major role in this phenomenon is carbon dioxide emission from industry. Some people argue that saving energy as much as possible will help decreasing the demand of energy, thus reducing carbon emission. Others maintain that reducing energy consumption in individual scale will only have small impact. The assumption of the latter may be true, but the argument does not consider the indirect implication of doing so in the holistic picture.
Lifestyle that emphasizes minimum consumption of energy will decrease the demand of energy without a doubt. However, this approach only works in individual scale, giving inconsequential impact on the whole problem. Energy for personal consumption is only a part of the whole energy industry market. Even though the demand of energy for personal consumption decreases, the demand of energy from big corporations or heavy industry will likely stay the same. Moreover, the population of developed countries in general is way less than thus of developing country where they prioritize their economic development than their carbon emission. We are all aware the fact that some of developed countries such as those in north Europe region successfully sustain their economy with only environmentally friendly source of energy. But, if we consider how much China releases its carbon dioxide to our atmosphere every year, this success seems futile to make any significant effect. Unless there is a massive change in the structure the overall market, such as an invention of affordable and sustainable source of energy or government intervention, this approach will not pan out. For such reason, some people do not champion this approach considering how it does not solve the core of the problem.
However, without doing so, the notion of how dangerous global warming is will not circulate pervasively in our society, and people will become less aware of the consequence. Despite of how obvious the effect of global warming taking place in some part of the world, some people even still stubbornly reject the existence of global warming, saying that it is just a propaganda or a concoction. Claiming such lifestyle does not give any effect on the problem will only exacerbate the situation. With the society becomes less aware, the whole society may eventually fall into the state of benighted, and lose its power to press the authority, our government, to take important measures before the damages caused by global warming turn irreversible. Even if our society today is well literate about global warming, we are still having hard time convincing our government to enact more stringent regulation about carbon emission. Take, for example, the current event when United States withdrew itself from Paris Agreement which it requires every participating country to reduce its carbon emission. This example illustrates how our government is not fully ready yet to tackle the global warming problem seriously. With less force from the society, Government will turn out more sluggishly in addressing this problem.
Currently, there is not a panacea for global warming problem and the problem is a tricky one. While it is true that reducing energy consumption will not do much in soothing the consequence of global warming, it will help propagate the idea of how dangerous global warming is, and make people become aware. Eventually, society in the developing countries will start paying more attention to this problem and prompting an immediate action to their government. For such reason, such lifestyle will definitely be helpful for the longevity of our habitat.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to decrease' or 'decrease'.
Suggestion: to decrease; decrease
...ng energy as much as possible will help decreasing the demand of energy, thus reducing car...
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Line 1, column 659, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on of doing so in the holistic picture. Lifestyle that emphasizes minimum consum...
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Line 9, column 1314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sluggishly in addressing this problem. Currently, there is not a panacea for gl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, in general, such as, it is true, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3224.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 606.0 442.535393258 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3201320132 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75980466713 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476897689769 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1024.2 704.065955056 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9217740059 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.407407407 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48148148148 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237528809984 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073824719605 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486661427764 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168672772625 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470404924699 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 100.480337079 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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