Some people believe it is imperative for individuals living in developed nations to reduce their energy consumption and lead a more sustainable lifestyle, given the evidence for global climate change. Others believe that such drastic lifestyle changes are unwarranted, based on the existing evidence for global climate change.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
It is imperative for individuals living in developed nations to reduce energy consumption and lead a more sustainable lifestyle as the global climate is changing rapidly. The reduction in energy consumption can take time and happen slowly and need not take place rapidly as people cannot immediately reduce their energy consumption.
If the people living in developed nations do not reduce their energy consumption, then it can lead to many problems. The excess energy consumption in developed nations may lead to severe shortage in energy resources in other undeveloped nations or shortage in same developed nations in the future. For example, some developed nations generate electricity using water. Global climate change can cause water shortage by less rainfall in developed nations which can lead to problems in generating power which is most important in many fields in developed nations. This reduction in power supply can cause many problems for the people in developed nations. Global climate change can pollute the environment and can cause to even food shortage in some cases which will become main problem for the developed nations.
However, it is true that drastic life changes are unwarranted, based on the existing evidence for global climate change. But life changes can made in developed nations slowly step by step reducing their energy consumption daily in small quantities. This way they can someday the people living in developed nations can achieve drastic reduction in their energy consumption.
It is imperative for people living in developed nations to reduce their energy consumption though drastic life changes are unwarranted. The reduction in energy consumption can be made in small quantities initially and later be made in large quantities thus leading to decreased energy consumption in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Did you mean 'evening'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: evening
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, thus, for example, in some cases, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1555.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 286.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43706293706 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75221026679 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 215.323595506 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423076923077 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2619948957 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.615384615 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466590517162 0.243740707755 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.219327096255 0.0831039109588 264% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148892168484 0.0758088955206 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338054697422 0.150359130593 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701201204627 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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