Some people believe it is imperative for individuals living in developed nations to reduce their energy consumption and lead a more sustainable lifestyle, given the evidence for global climate change. Others believe that such drastic lifestyle changes are unwarranted, based on the existing evidence for global climate change.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The prompt says that it is crucial for the citizens of developed nations to reduce their energy consumption and lead a sustainable lifestyle. While this changes doesn't guarantee immediate betterment in global climate, the sustainable measures should still be taken.
The ozone layer of atmosphere is responsible for preventing ultraviolet rays of sun from reaching the earth's surface. Human beings are accountable for the depletion of ozone layer and melting which has led to melting of polar ice and temperature rise in several countries. The air conditioners release CFC gas which reacts with ozone and creates holes in ozone layer of atmosphere. If the individuals reduce their use of these machines, the phenomenon of ozone layer depletion can be slowed. In addition, if more trees are planted, the increase in amount of oxygen can help fill up the holes in the layer as oxygen is one of the elements that makes up ozone.
The increase in amount of carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide is also one of the reasons of global warming. The drastic rise in number of automobiles has lead to the increase in the emission of these harmful gases in the atmosphere. If the citizens are advised to use public transports for long distance and bicycle for short distance, the use of personal vehicles will decrease which will decrease the emission of harmful gases. Moreover, less number of vehicles on road will reduce traffic which in turn will reduce noise pollution and save time.
If the citizens implement these changes in their lifestyle, this doesn't guarantee the betterment of the climate because the industrial plants are still going to work and use the energy. Eventhough all these changes will not bring the immediate effects on the global climate, exploiting the resources and not taking any measures will only make situation worse for the future generations. As it is said that drops of water fill the ocean, these small measures will surely make earth a better place for living.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...and lead a sustainable lifestyle. While this changes doesnt guarantee immediate bett...
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Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...stainable lifestyle. While this changes doesnt guarantee immediate betterment in globa...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... these changes in their lifestyle, this doesnt guarantee the betterment of the climate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, still, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03939393939 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6094217226 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50303030303 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4362011163 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.785714286 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192381002692 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690647025745 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678414452645 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132572480286 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815472640643 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.