A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they “frequently” had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20 percent also reported that they had felt “sad, down, or blue” at least three times within the past month.
These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked to depression and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author here interprets the survey of 250 adults between the age of 30 and 45 spending their time online and on the basis of certain statistics comes to the conclusion that spending too much time online has a connection with depression and one should limit their time online for the improvement of their well-being. However certain questions need to be answered before concluding such as What is the background of the adults taking the survey? Do they have kids or family members or any other reasons that may make them feel sad? What are the adults doing online? The answer to these questions decides whether the given argument is appropriate or not.
An individual with family problems or career problems can be sad or depressed regardless of their time spent online. As it is mentioned that 20 percent of adults reported feeling sad or down atleast three times withing the past month, it is not said that this was because of them spending 30 hours online per week. The survey should contain the question of what is the impact of spending time online on their emotional state. They can be sad or depressed and as a result of which they might be using their time to interact with others or do any other activities online to lessen their stress.
The profession or the medium of working of the adults is not provided. If an individual has work in the computer online, it can also be considered as spending time online. The survey result shows that the adults spending 30 or more hours online per week were more likely having trouble concentrating. While online distraction such as social media can be the reason for not being able to focus, there should be explanation on what type of activities adults do online to come to the conclusion that it brings interruption in concentration.
Although spending too much time online is not good for health and might result in disconnect with the surroundings, the evidences in the giving prompt are not enough to give the statement that one should limit their time online to prevent depression.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 411, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...ot being able to focus, there should be explanation on what type of activities adults do on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, well, while, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79378531073 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55980371117 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480225988701 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.6315395718 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.214285714 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276446447296 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108579794778 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849760355708 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178012175195 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701154422608 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 411, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...ot being able to focus, there should be explanation on what type of activities adults do on...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, well, while, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79378531073 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55980371117 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480225988701 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.6315395718 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.214285714 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276446447296 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108579794778 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849760355708 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178012175195 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701154422608 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.