A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours o

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A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they “frequently” had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20 percent also reported that they had felt “sad, down, or blue” at least three times within the past month.

These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked to depression and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

It may be true that spending too much time online can lead to depression and people who want to improve thier well being should limit the time they spend online, but author's argument relies on many stated and unstated assumptions. There are certain questions that author should address in order to validate the argument as a whole. If any of these questions are left unanswered it would be difficult for the reader to take a position.
First of all, author posits that survey was conducted on 250 adults. It might be possible that the 250 adults selected for survey are already under certain pressure conditions in life like work pressure, because between the ages of 30 and 45, work like is highly competitive. It may be possible it is not the spending of time online is the cause of depression but it is personal lifestyle that is causing depression. Is the survey conducted by a legitimate authority? Unless the author mentions the authority that conducted the survey and the feasibility of the survey, argument holds no water.
Secondly, author says adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week are twice as likely as others to report the frequent trouble in concentration. Author should verify whether spending more time online is solely responsible for issues in concentration. Thirdly, author claims that 20 percent of the adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online felt sad and down at least three times within the past month, but it might be possible that this was the case only in the past month. Prior to the past month, people were gregarious and happy in their life without any depression even after spending more than 30 hours per week online. It will injustifiable to consider only the past month's data.
Finally, author feels well being can be improved if the spending of too much time online is restricted. But in today's era, people are heavily dependent on technology for everything. The computer era doesn't allow to demarcate the spending of time online. Moreover, limiting the use of technology is not solely responsible for improving the well being. There are many factors that lead to a happy and cheerful well being.
As evidenced, author's argument depends on many unwarranted assumptions and subsequently fails to provide a cogent and well articulated argument. These questions must be acknowledged by author to provide a logical reasoning to the argument. Without providing answers to these questions, argument stands invalid.

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Average: 6.6 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 701, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'months'' or 'month's'?
Suggestion: months'; month's
...injustifiable to consider only the past months data. Finally, author feels well being...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...nology for everything. The computer era doesnt allow to demarcate the spending of time...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 212, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'demarcating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: demarcating
...erything. The computer era doesnt allow to demarcate the spending of time online. Moreover, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, at least, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99758454106 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65886737529 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485507246377 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6472479339 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5238095238 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220310433031 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627373125829 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724909634578 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109831250843 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929419744147 0.0628817314937 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 701, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'months'' or 'month's'?
Suggestion: months'; month's
...injustifiable to consider only the past months data. Finally, author feels well being...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 199, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...nology for everything. The computer era doesnt allow to demarcate the spending of time...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 212, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'demarcating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: demarcating
...erything. The computer era doesnt allow to demarcate the spending of time online. Moreover, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, at least, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99758454106 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65886737529 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485507246377 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6472479339 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5238095238 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220310433031 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627373125829 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724909634578 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109831250843 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929419744147 0.0628817314937 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.