Several charitable organizations in Pleasantville provide opportunities for teenagers to engage in community service. These organizations have a great need for volunteers, but in recent years, the number of teenage volunteers has significantly declined.
The Pleasantville School Board should take measures to increase the number of volunteers. Teachers, parents, and other community members agree that it is important for young people to learn the value of community service. Requiring high school students to engage in community service would provide much-needed assistance to worthy local charities and would also help young people understand the importance of giving back to their community. For this reason, the Pleasantville School Board should institute a program requiring students of Pleasantville High School to complete 40 hours of community service prior to graduation.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
It may be true that Pleasantville High School should institute a program wherein students will complete 40 hours of community services and this will boost the volunteering of teenagers for community service, but the argument depends on many stated and understated assumptions. Author should meticulously address all the assumptions that are required to.
Firstly, whether the community service held by charitable organisations are genuine? It might be possible that volunteering of teenagers declined because of disingenuous community service held by these organisations. It might be possible charitable organisations are not functioning properly; the owners of charity are trying to conceal their evil reputation through the charity. Everyone should understand what is the vision of charity. If the vision is highly positive, teenagers would love to volunteer. But if the vision is not so genuine, training students for 40 hours of community service in order to convince them to volunteer would be futile.
Secondly, it does not depend on what society wants from the teenagers of Pleasantville, rather it depends on teenager himself/herself whether he is interested in community service or not. It might be possible the events in community service are unable to lure teenagers of this generation and are boring or monotonous. Author should address what type of community service teenagers are expected to volunteer.
Moreover, if the school is offering 40 hours of community service prior to graduation, what about the cost of train the students? Is the cost paid by the government of Pleasantville or the school is expected to pay from its pocket? What are the returns school can expect by offering such community services? Author should acknwledge these assumptions. Without proper reasoning the argument holds no water.
If the 40 hours is utilised for community service, what about the academic courses? Is this community service to happen parallel to regular curriculum? Author should explain more in detail about the type of community service the school will provide and its guaranteed benefits to the society. It might be highly beneficial to charitable organisations, but it doesn't promise the continued volunteering from the students even after the program is completed.
As evidenced, argument is supported by many stated and unstated unwarranted assumptions; without these assumptions, the argument stands invalid and it becomes abstruce for a decision maker.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 2051 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.369 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.935 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.851 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.381 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.334 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ial to charitable organisations, but it doesnt promise the continued volunteering from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51842105263 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07236250422 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460526315789 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.0523726592 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8571428571 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0952380952 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252526247394 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799611225513 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602682472352 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13755765117 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549709131134 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.44 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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