The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
It may be true that encouraging Autotech to build automobile manufacturing plant in the city of Hillview can eradicate the problem of unemployment in the city, but the author's argument depends on many stated and unstated assumptions. It may be possibe that this decision may prove fruitful for the city of Hillview but there might be consequences to this decision. Author should carefully address those consequences and provide a well articulated argument.
First of all, is the serious unemployment problems only faced by the people of Hillview or is it faced by every nearby towns or is it faced by the whole nation? If there is an economic depression of the whole nation, building an automobile manufacturing plant alone cannot abate this issue, though it may be slighly helpful.
Secondly, encouraging the construction of automobile manufacturing company comes with a price. Automobile company may increase sound, air or water pollution. What is the amount of sound produced by the manufacturing plant? What is the amount of gas generated by the plant? Author should place the numbers showing whether the construction of manufacturing plant will be innocuous to the environment or not?
Thirdly, Author has mentioned Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. Author should be able to put correct reasoning: why did the former comapany abandon? Are the people of the city not interested in working in the city? Do they want to migrate to neighbouring meteropolitan cities for employment? Without a proper justification to these doubts, argument holds no water.
Finally, whether the offering of significant tax incentives will attract the company to build the manufacturing plant in Hill View? What is the exact tax incentives that can attract the company? Whether the figure is permissible by the City Council? Author should answer these question, and this can help city council to decide whether the new plan would be fruitful to the city or not.
As evidenced, author's argument depends on many stated and understated assumptions. Author should provide a cogent argument which can lead to a position, whether encouraging the construction of new manufacturing automobile plant is a wise decision?
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1857 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.216 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.002 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.952 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.853 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.312 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...em of unemployment in the city, but the authors argument depends on many stated and uns...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33426966292 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05365244765 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505617977528 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4890204773 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4285714286 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9523809524 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22868917876 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662348644462 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581628289828 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120009760809 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418780231815 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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