The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
"In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech
automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a
perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left
unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year.
am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives
to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the
recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these
questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
According to the author of this argument suggests that, in ordet to reduce the tension of unemploymet in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile plant. Which will lead to employment oppurtunity for the surrounding people which were left unemployed due to abandan of computech company. Thus the author asks the council to authorize a larger campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make town attractive to Autotech to open up its plant. At first glance this argument seems plausible. But after scrutinizing, the argument seems flawed as it depends upon unwarranted assumptions and unsupported statements which does not add up.
To start with, the author of argument suggests that, as Autotech opens up its company in the town it would lead to alleviate the unemployemt issue. How can this statement be proved? Is any supporting survey or stathestical data proviede for evidence? What was the leading cause for such great number of unemployment or is there a need to educate those people with new technology which will help to make up their stand in this rapidly growing world? All these questions need to be answered before validating the argument.
Additionally, Even if the company setup its plant in the town with what guarrenty it states that the new company will hier its employers for that town and not form some its neighbouring town. Also, would there be eniough employmets opportunity to alleviate its unemployment. Because of such rapid devlopment of technology, maximum of work is being done with the help of robots and automated machines and such is the case with modern automobile industry. Due to which the plants requiremnt od employees is very limited. Thus such kind of flawed reasoning would not help to reduce unemployment.
To add, on what basis the author suggests that Hillview landfiled would be the best place to set up the plant? By doing so if the natural habitat leaving in that area gets disturbed and would lead to disaterous effects on environment. Then such kind of industrial devlopment is worthless as it would lead to devastating moto of selfishness by exploiting environment to employ ourselfs.
Also, the author asks to peovide tax incentives and larger campagn to cajol the company. But by doing so will it surely affect the decision of the company to set up a plant in hissview? By providing tax incentives would affect service provided by the government to its citizens leading to greater devastative effects.
In conclusion, the argumen, as of now, relies on unwarranted and flawerd assumptions and deed to be evaluated and answer all the above questions to prove the validity of the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 28 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 445 350
No. of Characters: 2202 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.593 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.948 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.789 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.227 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.842 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.279 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 309, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ed due to abandan of computech company. Thus the author asks the council to authoriz...
^^^^
Line 5, column 520, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...equiremnt od employees is very limited. Thus such kind of flawed reasoning would not...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, in conclusion, kind of, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07191011236 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8536105277 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507865168539 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 693.0 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5194260237 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.590909091 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2272727273 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133997538224 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371181913043 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503598710228 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0612602887614 0.128457276422 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518174912709 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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