The value of money should be instilled into youngsters since childhood because social success
in defined by the amount of money one has.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your
position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be
advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In todays mundane society if we need to brightly shine and make our iwn stand we need to develope and shape our minds in such an extra-ordinary way from our childhood ,so that we can achieve our goal. The prompt suggests that, value of money should be imbibe into one from ones childhood, as social success is defined ny the amount of money one has. In my opinion, I disagree with the prompt, as money can ont be the only factor to value our status in society.
To start with, money is just a small aspect or secondary in our life, money cannot buy happyness, satisfaction or moral values which we need to explore them and find appropriate ways to persue them. Money is materialistic and does not play crucial role in shaping our way through exhausting and hectic life. For example, a billionare, whose main motive was just to earn money, for which, what ever it might take. In doing so he lost family, no support from his relatives or friends, no social gatherings, neglegibal happyness. Such kind of behaviour caused him ho lose his family and friends. So just runiing behind materialistic success is not important, the moral techings from our society is moe important. Thereore, youngsters should embibe the moral values not the defination of social success as money.
Additionally, to make a stand in sociey money is not the only aspect, we should gain respect form society, which we need to earn and cannot be bought. So during our childhood youngsters should learn, persue social respect and eventually apply them in society. For example, if a boy in his childhood was not tought social respect of elders and taught to earn monry from each gueat who come at their place. Such social being will earn evear critisism rathen then praise from the society. Thus, we should not install such kind of errorous believes in young ones.
Of course, one might argue that, money is essential to make how living, buy our daily needs, but solely relying on such cravings cannot lead us throuch socirty. And we may end up lonely, amongst the wrong circle of the cociety with zero moral value and finally would lead to disasterou
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, second, so, then, thus, for example, kind of, of course, in my opinion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7358490566 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44474542121 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56064690027 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7158379075 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.352941176 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.21951772744 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232427376824 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862823590008 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884452334778 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142624459587 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521743855669 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.