The fact that technology is outpacing the needs of those in cultures that can afford the technology creates cultures of excess consumerism.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. Indeveloping and sup

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The fact that technology is outpacing the needs of those in cultures that can afford the technology creates cultures of excess consumerism.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. Indeveloping and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Now-a-days, rate at which technology is growing is enormous, and people who can afford have to started to adopt it and tasks like buying anything, transport, making food, calling are being made easier by technology startups like Amazon, Uber, Zomato, and by smartphones and TV companies. Considerable amount of the population makes use of these services increasingly out of proportion with regards to their needs. Also, there are few those who use these services in moderation, when needed, and otherwise are not dependent on them.

Previously, when I was a kid, we had only 1 phone in our house, and today, everyone including the 5 year old kid in the house has a phone in his hands, which is clearly indicative of highly spread consumerism due to fast evolving smartphone technology, as certainly a 5 year old kid does not need a smartphone, and is definitely a luxury item. Also, few years back, everyone had normal phones for a long duration, but today, everyone owns a smartphone, which change with a very high frequency, clearly indicating that a need that was not there previously got created due to the introduction of fast-paced technological changes. This is not to say that the smartphone technology is bad, but that attitude of people has become more towards consumerism due to it.

Consider another example, pertaining to online delivery services like Amazon and Zomato. I see many students ordering things that they would not have bought by actually going to a shop, and thus things without which they can do just fine, but nevertheless they buy, as it is super easy to buy things and get it delivered to your doorstep. Similar thing goes with food, as some families prefer to order food to their doorstep, which is easier than cooking it themselves. Essentially, these services offer an easy alternative to existing tasks like buying things, and making food, thus causing users to consume more.

These things, however, depend completely on the individual, as there is a sizeable population that can afford these services, but still prefers to stick to their ways, only seeking them when absolutely required. I personally know well-off businessmen, who live a simple life, and only use technology to address their needs, not as an easy alternative. I think that this mostly depends on the attitude of a person. If a person is of a lazy disposition, he will try to substitute tasks requiring effort with easier alternatives, while a frugal person will only use services when needed and not more.

In conclusion, I think that due to technology outpacing needs of people, for those who can afford it, it is becoming all too easy to increase their "needs", but the few people who can make a sound distinction between actual needs and luxury items continue to lead the same life as before.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, while, i think, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 473.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96405919662 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85028008505 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541226215645 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 13.0 1.67365269461 777% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.7225576931 57.8364921388 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.533333333 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5333333333 23.324526521 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156753245779 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487714298412 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415416238422 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0905937482242 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325298668239 0.0628817314937 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.3799401198 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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