Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Leadership positions in government, industry demand diverse skill set in an invdividual, starting from being competent in technical matters to being a good team player. An important part of the role is to manage a team, and thus sense of cooperation in team is very important. Although extreme competitive attitude with a solo performing attitude is not good, healthy competitive spirit is desired alongwith a team spirit.
Any industry or government leadership position is not about doing one's own job without any cooperation, but is more about managing people and dividing the job and getting it done. These kind of roles inherently need people with good people skills, people who can interact well and get the cooperation of other people and build a strong team to tackle a job. The saying 'Team work makes the dream work' is true for such and applies to such kind of roles. If a person is very competitive and very competent in technical matters, but does not have a team spirit and a sense of cooperation, then he will certainly fail miserably as a leader. So, if an attitude of cooperation is not instiiled into the youth from early on, they will have difficulties being a leader in their lives.
This being said, we cannot underestimate role of competition that one has to face in leadership roles. Competition cannot be avoided in any kind of leadership roles, be it as a political leader or minister, or as a CXO of any company. If the youth is not prepared for such kinds of competition from an early stage in life, they will not be equipped with the appropriate mindset to tackle and emerge successful from such cut-throat competition. For a company, if the CEO is not able to anticipate the effect of its competitors in their business, he may end up taking bad decisions, and the growth of the company may suffer. If the CEO cannot handle stress resulting from the cut-throat competition, he will not be able to keep his calm and make rational decisions at an important moment. So, a competitive attitude, and a competent skill set is essential for a leader.
Thus, competition as well as cooperation are both important for a leader, and absence of any one of them will affect the quality of the person as a leader, and so society should prepare the youth with both of these qualities.
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...ers, but does not have a team spirit and a sense of cooperation, then he will cer...
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...their business, he may end up taking bad decisions, and the growth of the company...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, then, thus, well, as to, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1905.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7625 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82859395283 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6331064846 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219063271202 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763675638864 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553047170712 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13301328156 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381924753914 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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