Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.

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Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.

It is very crucial to shape our future generations of leaders in such a way that they are fitting for their positions when the time comes. It might be wise to instill many characteristics into these young minds early on in life, these characteristics include sense of cooperation and competition. In my opinion, I think that it is equally important to support both characteristics to have wise and well-oriented future leaders.

By instilling a sense of cooperation, we help young people to develop the sense of responsibility coupled with compassion towards others. In other words, having a cooperative personality will build a future leader who's not only aiming to improve their leadership skills, but also aiming to include their team along the way, to have a healthy supportive environment for the people he or she leads. This will significantly improve the productivity and general positivity of those who work under that leader. Additionally, having a sense of cooperation will improve the leader's communication skills, since you can't "cooperate" if you don't "communicate", and therefore it will be easier for the person to better communicate their ideas not only as a leader, but also as a human being. Some might claim that cooperation might distract the leader from the main goal - for the organization, country, etc. - by involving other parties, and I'd argue that cooperation and sharing ideas with others might actually make reaching that goal even faster. Because different minds don't think the same way, and some people might provide you with valuable ideas that you never thought of. Hence, shutting off external ideas might make it more difficult to reach that goal.

It must also be noted that cooperation does not negate competition, and indeed competition is as important. The sense of competition within an organization pushes people to do better in work and in life. If sense of competition isn't instilled in our youth, then it will be a difficult task to for that person to seek self-improvement, since -in their mind- they are good enough, and they don't need further betterment. Consequentially, making a leader who not only doesn't aim to better themselves, but also has no certain goals of milestones for his organization. Leading to an all-in-all failure. Opponents of the concept of competition will argue that competition can be a toxic trait that make some people take extreme measures to reach where they want, harming many people in the process. But it needs to be realized that competition coupled with cooperation can never lead to such a result, because cooperation instills selflessness in ones character.

In summary, the young generations are definitely more open-minded than the older ones, and it is not a hard task to instill characterstics of leadership in them, as long as they are taught the concept of ' all for one and one for all', to balance their sense of competition with cooperation.

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Average: 6.2 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, i think, in summary, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17879417879 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22773596707 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49896049896 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 774.0 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7905312844 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.105263158 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3157894737 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261695190574 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784920882428 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550127798973 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134039238135 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961572778085 0.0667264976115 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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