The first step to self-knowledge is rejection of the familiar.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Finding the concept of self is an important life task to everyone. Some people would claim that rejecting familiar backgrounds is the key in achieving self-knowledge since the concept of true self should be seperated from backgrounds. Others would argue that these endowed backgrounds are necessary in shaping the personalities of people, eventually shaping self. I believe that we must review our backgrounds and habits. People's ideology is heavily affected by their surroundings and therefore we must regard them highly.
People who claim that we should reject the familiar would argue that, to find who we really are, we must throw away characteristics we share in common. It is true that the environment that we live in is much more influencial than genetic features. One recent research states that identical twins raised in opposite living environments resulted in opposite personalities. However, the concept of "self" is not a fixed term. Self varies constantly as we live; every time we have a conversation with people and understand new views, our concept of self varies. Therefore, it is pelucid that our environment is a mandatory factor when considering our self-knowledge.
Moreover, to understand our true self, we must review our habits. Familiar habits that we perform unconciously are indicators of our self-knowldege. I have a hobby of playing table tennis and computer games rather than watching TV during my free time. This implies that I like to move my body and make decisions myself, rather than accepting other people's ideas. As we can see from this example, analysing our habits and hobbies can help finding what our self-knowledge is.
Ultimately, after considering both sides of the recommendation, it is clear that our familiar backgrounds are crucial in finding self-knowldege. Our self-knowledge is inseperable from our environment and habits, as they are reflections of us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 440, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to find' or 'find'.
Suggestion: to find; find
...alysing our habits and hobbies can help finding what our self-knowledge is. Ultimate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 302.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3642384106 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22922389047 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562913907285 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9817249996 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.0 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7777777778 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0721617297055 0.243740707755 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.027665179476 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.025983598692 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.053652938449 0.150359130593 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0102295213927 0.0667264976115 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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