Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.

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Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.

The knowledge and wisdom that the humanity have stacked is accumulating every year which means the basic requirement of being educated is becoming higher and higher. More and more people want to go to universities and get higher education. But it doesn’t mean everyone who are heading to higher level school have enough money. I agree that to some students who are talented but don’t have enough money to afford the tuition fee, the government have some responsibility to raise a fund to them. However, it would be quite out of point if the government support all the students who don’t have the tuition.

Some proponents of the statements would contend that the government has the responsibility to support the people who are willing going to the university because it would be unfair to take their chances just because of money. It seems plausible because the purpose of the university is to give didactic messages on the aspects of both life and major to people who are willing to get it, not an exchangment of cash and education. Also, according to the statistics, the percentage of university graduated population become as twice as big comparing to those of 50 years ago. The data of statistics is telling us that more people are willing going to the university and the government should at least give people chance.

However, we should think about the side effects if the government starts paying all the tuition. The biggest side effect would be emergence of “weak” universities. Rather than teaching students about life and enhancing them to specialized scholar, those universities are focused on government’s support to poor students. On the apparent aspect they say that they will educate well, in the inside they use money in a different way. For example, about 15% of universities in Korea which are currently running and getting support from the nation didn’t get the approval from the ministry of education because they did insufficient education compare to tuition fee. Instead, they used it on professor’s private trips and parties. Another side effect would be people might be imposed to go to university because everyone go to university. They may feel isolated if they are the only one who don’t have a degree and be forced going to the university. It means the government should support all of them, lavishing nation’s budget.

Because of these side effects, I recommend that government should first select valid students by passing some kind of trial. Those valid students would be talented enough to understand what the professors have taught and helpful to nation in the future but don’t have enough money. Thinking about the side effects of giving money to everyone who can’t afford the money, it would be better to support only to good students.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...of 50 years ago. The data of statistics is telling us that more people are willing...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ent should at least give people chance. However, we should think about the side ...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cate well, in the inside they use money in a different way. For example, about 15% of universities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, at least, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2377.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12284482759 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87626875148 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463362068966 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0684839024 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.19047619 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0952380952 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61904761905 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23753791542 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802736290448 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475220641041 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161179364314 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361184779998 0.0667264976115 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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