It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are generated and preserved.
It is important for a nation to have a particular culture but it becomes one of the main identity to be as a nation. No wonder that every nations in the world use their strength to examine where the cultural tradition occurred and where the preserve it. The statement explains that cities are the primary source of the creation and the preservation of the culture. I agree that a nation’s cultural traditions are generated in cities but disagree that the cities are the place where we preserve the traditions.
There are several standards for dividing the city and the rural area, and one of them is the population. When the population is big enough to become the representative of the area, people prefer to build important buildings to support such representation such as city hall or education establishment. By this process, people starts to make more and more interactions with other people, creating new inventions, discoveries and foundations. From those innovations, citizens will choose several innovations which is good enough to descend to their further generation. The ideas that descended through generation eventually become tradition. Most of the discoveries or foundations that become a tradition today started in cities such as Christian which was generated in Israel and flourish in Rome.
Ironically, this is exactly the reason why the cities is not a good place to preserve cultural traditions. Because of enormous amount of interaction due to huge population and the complexity of the city system, the city impose oneself be creative and become new. It means there would be and should be advent of new ideas every time. It means the new idea that became a tradition because it is good enough could not stay at the city anymore and moves to the rural area. One of the exemplar will the population distribution of traditional technology preservation masters in Korea. Except for some special cases that the master should stay at the city such as architect of the Korean Palace, most of the traditional technology masters stays at the rural area because the source or it ingredients of the technology don’t exist in the city any more because they are too old fashioned or not efficient anymore to use in city life.
For such reason, I partly agree that the advent of cultural traditions occurs in the city but partly disagree that the preservation of cultural traditions mostly happens on the rural area.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, except for, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2038.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04455445545 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86922510457 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460396039604 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7161153406 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.882352941 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7647058824 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88235294118 5.21951772744 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292700248975 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104352140527 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898518718849 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205995641239 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851413763045 0.0667264976115 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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