Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supp

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Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

As the anticipated lifetime of human become longer, the education system through out the world has become sophisticated and complicated. Starting from elementary school to graduated school, people get their education for one or two decades. The statement suggest the policy that during those years the system of education should actively encourage students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. In my opinion, the rightness of the statement depends on what stage of education the policy should be started.

Advocates who believe that it should be started at the embryonic stage of education contend that the nation should help students to learn the fields of study which will be suitable to oneself as soon as possible. The length of life time is limited and the length of time that they could easily absorb the information that they had been taught is even more circumscribed. For instance, we hear things that when we learn language such as English or French after the stage of adolescence, it became difficult to learn because the brain starts to lose the ability of learning new language. It is true because the brain area that controls language starts to get “stiff” when a person become a teenager.

However, learning a new language and choosing a field of study that will be helpful for the future career is totally a different matter. The advocates should rewind their memories when they were young before expressing their ideas. Are they affirmative to speak out loud that the fields they took in the past that have no relationship with current career do not have a single influence? No one could deny that any kind of experiences and educations in the past eventually enhance and flourish both a person’s life and wisdom. No one knows from where they will get the seed of inspiration that benefits the career in the future. Did Steve Jobs know that one day the calligraphy lecture he took when he was university student will be helpful when he designed the revolutionary device, Apple 2?

I recommend that until high school or even university, the education institutions should let students what they want to learn for the sake of diversity and creativity that will change the world some day. Thinking about the world trend which is academic pluralism, rather this is what should be actively encouraged. The diversity and creativity occurs through linking two seperate fields and to link those two, the student should understand both side profoundly. On the other hand, it would be definite to encourage graduate students to choose courses for lucrative careers. The purpose of graduate school education is to build a specialist that would lead the field some day, so it would be unwise to let the student dig wide but shallow well of knowledge.

Considering the acedemic trend which is combining seperate fields and encouraging creativity, it would be wiser to recommend the diversity of the field for most cases.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...man become longer, the education system through out the world has become sophisticated and ...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...n for one or two decades. The statement suggest the policy that during those years the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...self as soon as possible. The length of life time is limited and the length of time that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, for instance, kind of, such as, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.3162921348 239% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2488.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03643724696 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70848386915 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48987854251 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9492895737 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.4 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258260459819 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827035756919 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825847575303 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151870600499 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563449318804 0.0667264976115 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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