The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.
"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
The recommendation that Batavia government should regulate the increased milk prices, at first, might seem very convincing, but as we continue to observe the aspects of the given reasons, the recommendation seems to need some necessary evidences to be logically sound.
First, the author states that a report from the agriculture department states the number of dairy farms has increased by 25% over the span of 10 years. The increasing number of dairy farms does not necessarily proves that the production of milk has also increased. It might be possible that the new dairy farms don’t have enough cows to produce milk as the old ones. Also, maybe the cows at the new dairy farms are too young to produce milk. If the author had provided some estimated milk production, that would have made his recommendation clearer and convincing.
Secondly, the author states that the milk price at local market has increased significantly. Here the author has mentioned only one local store. There is no statement that the price has increased at other local stores as well. A survey proving that milk prices have increased at all of the local stores is also not given, As It may be possible that the particular local market has increased the price to profit itself. No proof of investigation has been provided regarding this possibility.
Thirdly, the author assumes that the profit is going to the farmers. No support is provided for this assumption. There may be a chance that the suppliers are the ones gaining profit from the increased amount at the market. The dairy farms might be located far from the market. Also, it can be possible that the packaging companies are getting the significant amount out of the total cost. the milk cartons or bottles might cost more than the milk itself, causing the increase in prices.
Conclusively, if the author provided a survey report from different local stores, or stated a proof of investigation held at local Excello food market that they did not sell milk at high rate. these crucial evidences would have bolster the author’s recommendation.
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Suggestion: prove
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Suggestion: all the
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
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Suggestion: These
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Message: Use past participle here: 'bolstered'.
Suggestion: bolstered
...ate. these crucial evidences would have bolster the author's recommendation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03151862464 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73932394921 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484240687679 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.4220772635 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4210526316 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3684210526 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0841349934084 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319000913611 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472017465311 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0479057177086 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048679853218 0.0667264976115 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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