In preceding argument, the author avers that there is a decline in the movies viewers by citing a study from the the marketing department indicate that the quality of movies are very good and depends on these results it should attract myriad segments of people, but the actual status is not met the director expictation and decided to invest more money to marketing the movies. While the argument seems to be quite plausabile at first glance, a closer scrutiny sheds light on a plethora of questions yet to be answered, which could dampen the valuation of the prediction made obove.
To begin with, we do not know how the research was carried out, and wether the results are reliable and if the sample have been representative of large scope. Even though there is a concrete and positive corrolation between invests more money on the movies advertisment and rise the viewers percentage, this does not necessarily indicate the casual relationsip between the two events. because there are conditions can be jointly determined by myriad factors including, the types of movies, and the argument indicate a specific type of movies have the attractions from the viewers. furthermore, the time that displays the movies is it applicable with viewers time, or may be the price of attending these movies very costely because is has high a quality. In order to figure out the true cause of the movies viewers decline, a thorough investigation considering the leverage of all possible contributions is expected.
last but not least, there is another clue in the report that remain vague and elusive is the author indicate the cause of the decline is the lack of people awarness about the availability of great movies quality, hence, the question here how they conclude the result depends on what, what are the samples types have taken, moreover, the result can be affected by multifarious variances.
In conclusion, increasig the audiences rate by using advertisments do not substantiate the author/'s standpoint in the slightest way, and need to be viewed discreetly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...e movies viewers by citing a study from the the marketing department indicate that the ...
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Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...e movies viewers by citing a study from the the marketing department indicate that the ...
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Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'viewers'' or 'viewer's'?
Suggestion: viewers'; viewer's
...on the movies advertisment and rise the viewers percentage, this does not necessarily i...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...ual relationsip between the two events. because there are conditions can be jointly det...
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tors including, the types of movies, and the argument indicate a specific type of...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
... have the attractions from the viewers. furthermore, the time that displays the movies is ...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...tractions from the viewers. furthermore, the time that displays the movies is it ...
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Suggestion: Last
... possible contributions is expected. last but not least, there is another clue in...
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Suggestion:
... way, and need to be viewed discreetly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07941176471 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79205961359 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567647058824 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0359550562 161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.0019607617 60.3974514979 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 191.888888889 118.986275619 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.7777777778 23.4991977007 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.55555555556 5.21951772744 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139100350552 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539933176918 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043847215278 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739916766608 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370024650885 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 14.1392134831 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.1743820225 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 11.8971910112 223% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.2143820225 150% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.7820224719 229% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.