In the preceding argument, the author states that they ought to supply Ultraclean hand washing to all hospital system to prevent serious patient infection, the conclusion of the argument is based on the following premises. Firstly, he states a study indicates that using this hand washing produced a 40 percent greater reduction in the bacteria population than the liquid hand soaps. Secondly he boosts his case by stating that there is a hospital used UltraClean and reported fewer cases of patient infection. Therefore, in the first glance it may seem plausible. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on plethora of assumption that could undermine the value of the argument.
To begin with, the author readily states a laboratory study of liquid hand soaps and UltraClean hand soaps. In deed, several factors are elusive and intractable such as, what is type the of this study, is it representative enough to draw a conclusion? Plus, is the lab result precise enough. Perhaps the lab is not specialized or perhaps does not has tools to reflect the real condition. Further, what is the criteria they used to conclude this assumption. Thus, all these factors play a major role to extrapolate the results and in order to bolster his case he has to provide more information about the laboratory study methods and tools.
Furthermore, even there is a positive and concrete relation between using UltraClean and reduction the bacteria population to 40 percent. This, does not necessarily indicate a conspicuous relation between the two events. In other words, from where he concluded this result and how strong relation is. Perhaps the 40 percent reduction is not significant because we do not have any information about the real infection number to deiced whether is it reliable reduction or not. Or it might be the washing methods are different. In other words, some of them are washing their hands in right way while another they do not. In deed, building a decision depends on weak causation is not plausible and he has to present a real numbers that reflect the past and the present status.
Thirdly, the fallacy of the argument also lies in assuming that what hold true in one hospital will hold true with the other hospitals. In fact, he fails to state this assumption because the report did not mention any details about this hospital perhaps they are using another materials to mitigate patient infection or perhaps they are teaching them how to wash their hands or perhaps due to presence a strong infection control system. Hence, the assumption lack a depth of details that undermine the value of the argument and he has to explain and analysis the real situation to reflect and generalize the success.
All in all, the argument fails to provide one key factor. Namely, the all the previous assumptions are equivocal. Thus, without complete information the argument is unsubstantiated and opened to debate.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Therefore, to prevent serious patient infections, we should supply UltraClean at all hand-washing stations throughout our hospital system.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2379 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.915 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.627 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.246 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.262 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.48 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.122 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: have
... is not specialized or perhaps does not has tools to reflect the real condition. Fu...
^^^
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... is not specialized or perhaps does not has tools to reflect the real condition. Fu...
^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he laboratory study methods and tools. Furthermore, even there is a positive an...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, as to, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04545454545 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68986682051 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477272727273 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0902679101 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.75 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148482374068 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402398609311 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728741730746 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078017445843 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597689958387 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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