Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Universities and colleges have long been the source of knowledge for a plethora of individuals. The class-room setting as well as the books that kids carry to their classes have long been a ritual that kids follow. Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. I agree with this statement. I reckon that the world is developing towards more pragmatic ways of solving problems. And hence, the education system should also revamp the mode of delivery of education inorder to make studying less bland and more exciting. The reasoning being my position will be explained in the paragraphs below.
Firstly, class-rooms have always been a room for teachers to deliver their daily sermon and the students to listen to it. Such a setting is prevalent almost everywhere around the world. Such a communication is a one-way communication which does no good to the students present in the classroom. For example, a teacher is teaching something related to the internal organs of a human-body to a fifth grader. Formal education is a type of education system where the kids just listen to what is being said by their faculty. The teacher has no clue if the kids are grasping what she is teaching. Students in fifth grade might know the basic organs, but a detailed study would probably throw them astray since they have no image or no diagram to relate to. This brings about lethargy as well as disinterestedness among the students. A better approach would have been a pictorial diagram or YouTube video which gives a summary about the whole body, but in an interactive way.
Secondly, formal education will restrict the knowledge of an individual to books itself. Stepping into the real world, a kid will face difficulty adjusting to the practical way of going about their work. This is the reason why a kid should have equivalent practical as well as theoretical knowledge to excel in the world today. Universities have moved towards providing co-operative education as part of the course requirement. People question that such a deviation from education would hinder their rhythm of studying. But these people fail to realize the importance of practical and hands-on experience which a kid fails to achieve while sitting in a classroom listening to the lectures that are being delivered.
Opponents of the above claim suggest that practical education is too much of a burden for kids who are in their nascent years and are getting a hold upon the alphabets of English as well as the numerals present in mathematics. I agree with these individuals that co-operative education methods or even highly practical methods would be a tough task for the kids in their fledgling years to grasp. But if these students are taught concepts by the virtue of interactive videos and playful nursery rhymes, it would definitely leave a more lasting impact on the kids than a one-way delivery of lectures that is prevalent in formal education today.
In sum, I am a staunch believer of the fact that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. Newer and interactive techniques of imparting education to kids have proved to been fruitful in the recent years by child psychologists. Therefore, in my opinion, it is high time that we move away from conventional techniques such as formal education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an interactive way" with adverb for "interactive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as for, for example, i reckon, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2799.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 562.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98042704626 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77684360827 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483985765125 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 866.7 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9911384395 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9642857143 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0714285714 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32142857143 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190197809352 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592285403344 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090130687372 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123843746621 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703447558006 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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