Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Education can be classified into formal and informal, An informal education is the education a person acquire at home that taught by parents while a formal education is the education obtained from a teacher or tutor.
Some would argue that Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. but others would states that formal education tend to set our minds and spirit free. After weighing the evidence, it is certain that Formal education tends set our mind and spirit free rather than restrain them.

Those that argue that formal education tend to restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free might point to the fact that formal education is fastidious and time consuming but they never consider the end result of it being demanding which actually leads to discovery of many things we enjoyed today.
Also they may also point to the fact that it makes someone sanctimonious in nature such as a philosopher in Egypt, Mader Steve which everybody believe the formal education has turned his head outside down but they may not be able to reason​ that formal education brought talent in the lives of many erudite scholars and researchers in which we enjoy their contributions to medicine, Engineering, humanity and so on.

For people who believe that formal education is makes our mind and spirit free rather than restrain them would states that formal education brings enlightenment and exposure which is true. Let us take for instance, if not for formal education many local people might not have opportunity to get exposed to the city. Also many people might not know wat is going on in the world.

Also these people believe that formal education has contributed enmassly to the development and advancement of the world. For example the development of new drugs and equipment in medicine, the advancement of technology and so on and so forth.

In conclusion, it is clear that formal education tends to free our mind rather restrain them considering the impact of formal education to the world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 343.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98833819242 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55682970361 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448979591837 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.9298218113 60.3974514979 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.583333333 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5833333333 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.653003021377 0.243740707755 268% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.345719817692 0.0831039109588 416% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.291346291925 0.0758088955206 384% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.371824259706 0.150359130593 247% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.274469247318 0.0667264976115 411% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.1392134831 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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