Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Education, which is one of the important policies in a nation, can shape the youth for next generation. The statement claims that the formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. However, I totally disagree with the argument based on two following reasons.
First of all, some people may argue that the formal education in school trains students to fit in society as a group, and this training would restrain their spirits and minds. Nevertheless, fitting in the group does not imply to limit people's imagination and behavior. To be specific, the lessons in school are designed for group cooperation, and students can learn to work with others. From a British research, the learning process of school in early age can help students to fit in society for their future life. Furthermore, a group of people can implement a large scale of project rather than limit in individual based. This is the reason why I refute that the argument of teamwork directly leads to retrain students' thinking.
More important of all, the formal education enables us to think independently and critically, which can set our minds and spirits free. It is the experiments in science class teach us how to verify the fact steps by steps, and it is the debating activities in society class that inspire us to analyze the social issues.
For example, perhaps for those who do not have a change to accept formal education, they may accept the entire thing they receive from news, because they do not have any experience from classes to analyze the "facts". Or maybe they would trust all of the advertisements for health related products since they do not understand how to verify the information from searching and studying research. Thus, education can help students improve their ability to think rather than restrain their mind.
In summary, from above mentioned, education can equip us the ability to cooperate with others and think independently, since I strongly disagree with the claim from the original arguments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 255, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...;facts'. Or maybe they would trust all of the advertisements for health related produ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, in summary, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06784660767 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72805064751 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4114240375 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.533333333 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200558892006 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788516467789 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101208259773 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129400316862 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956890672577 0.0667264976115 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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