In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients’ medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
Reducing Costs
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients’ records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Preventing Errors
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients’ health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Aiding Research
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors’ offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
In contrast to the reading passage, which emphasizes the benefits of using electronic databases for keeping medical information, the professer states that it is uncertain for the benefits mentioned in the article based on the following reasons.
First, the author suggests that the use of electronic records can reduce the storage for keeping paper records, and the cost of storage can be significantly reduce. However, the professor refutes it by pointing out that the paper records can not be abadon since they contain emergency and legal result in those documents.
According to the passage, it can reduce the possibility of making medical mistakes after transfer the records in electronic standardization. Nevertheless, the professor contends that most doctors write by hand during examine patients. Later, their staffs input the hand-writting document into the computer. That is to say, the root cause of misintepretting hand writting document can not be solved because the behavior of doctors remain unchanged.
Finally, the professor implies that the medical records are protected by strict privacy laws which not allow to grant these records without patients' permission. To be more specific, the usage of analyzing electronic medical records for research purposes is not pratical at all.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'granting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: granting
... by strict privacy laws which not allow to grant these records without patients permissi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, in contrast, in contrast to, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1106.0 1373.03311258 81% => OK
No of words: 199.0 270.72406181 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55778894472 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 4.04702891845 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90186973491 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 145.348785872 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582914572864 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 343.8 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5832587954 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.888888889 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 21.698381199 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06452816374 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199327291637 0.272083759551 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797133914298 0.0996497079465 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596943192909 0.0662205650399 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118946721704 0.162205337803 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609055441175 0.0443174109184 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.42419426049 118% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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