Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

Because the education is a salient thing to cultivate future generation, the issue of the form of the education is important. Especially, the issue about formal education is controversial.
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In the case that the formal education is not monitored and scrutinized properly, formal education has potential danger to hold back student's minds and spirits. Because the nationally uniformed curriculum can be used for control the people's mind. In virtue of the fact that the education, especially served to the young students, has strong power of influence on the way of thinking and behavior, it can manipulate student minds and spirits in the clever and indirect ways. That it, the education can be used as a tool to bridle the unconsciousness of the students. For example, the North Korea invest huge amount of budget to design to make national curriculum to manipulate students' minds and spirits as the dictator wishes. Unless the education system is not well established in the democratic way, it will be deleterious to the freedom of the people.

However, when the formal education is well organized and managed, it has several advantages. It has positive repercussion on individuals and the progress of society. For individuals, owing to the fact that the formal education grants the equality of education, it contributes to enhance the happiness of the individuals. For example, because the national education can serve the standardized curriculum, many people who are in comparatively destitute condition can be guaranteed the opportunities of education. And this basic opportunities work as the equal ground to achieve their success in the future.
Moreover, the formal education also can be efficacious for society as whole. Because by serving formal education, the government can hand down the virtues and values which are prevailed in the existing generation. Formal education plays important role to combine the generations by sharing the virtues and values, and it is crux to make and retain the sustainable and harmonious society. For instance, through teaching the history and national language to all members of the nation, it can increase the sense of community and cooperation.

All in all, it is true that the education can be misused to manipulate the people's minds and spirits. When it falls a status of a passive tool to serve the preference of the dictator, it will be harmful for the liberty of the people. However, if it is well scrutinized in democratic way, formal education have several positive effect on both individuals and society. Therefore, we need to attempt to control the formal education well rather than abjuring it.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 427.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2318501171 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99884975183 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461358313817 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6550459986 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.380952381 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147131047616 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514174092424 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0266333821229 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0920455672205 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146299915218 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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